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Where has your tempest glory fled,
Warhorse?
Iron shod, gun metal gleaming. Warhorse.
Where are your marching men,
Warhorse?
Is this you, trench wet, red meat, screaming. Warhorse.
What’s glory when you’re dead.



Where has your tempest glory fled,
Warhorse?
Iron shod, gun metal gleaming.
Warhorse.
Where are your marching men,
Warhorse?
Is this you, trench wet, red meat, screaming.
Warhorse.
What’s glory when you’re dead?


I posted these two variation of the poem to see what people think. The only difference is the placing of the word 'warhorse' and a question mark added on the final line.

Originally I tried both of these and settled on the first, but NotesOnMyPiano has prompted me to take a second look and get a second opinion.

Keeping the word 'warhorse' included rather than separated on some lines is part of the rhythm. I tried it as you suggested, but didn't like it. The flow is supposed to be a little more staccato than even.
As to adding a question mark on the end, it is meant as a statement, not a question. Again, I tried it as you suggested, and didn't like it.

Anyway, I really appreciate your feedback and am going to post the poem with the changes you suggested alongside the original see what people think.