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 Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2006 5:05 pm
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Posted: Sun Jan 29, 2006 5:12 pm
I like them. They're short sweet and to the point. Though I can write long poems, and read them sometimes, I like them better short and sweet.
Keep it up!
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Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 6:02 am
More short and sweets? It's an epidemic. anyway, I think It would be better if you gave these poems, each, a title. I'd understand them better. apart from that, good pieces of poetic writing.
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Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 6:10 am
Cool, yeah I should probly title them...do that right now x). And when I read long poems.. sometimes they confuse meh.. xD
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Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2006 6:14 am
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Posted: Tue Jan 31, 2006 5:21 pm
In regards to "A New Light", I'd have to say this poem has an interesting twist to it. Usually, light is symbolic of things warm, comforting, wise, and all around good. However, this new light, brings fourth a shadow of pain and longing. Even the last three words, hope and faith being such positive words, and then end it with the word despair, which is the opposite of faith and hope. Very interesting.
I also really like the lines:
I still wish you were here, in front of my eyes,
Not in back of my mind
Keep it up.
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Posted: Tue Jan 31, 2006 5:38 pm
very nice. I know the feeling conveyed in "A New Light." 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Feb 01, 2006 8:52 am
"Listen To Me"
I like the way it wraps around pain
"A Whole New light"
kinda carries along the lines of "Listen..." with a little bit more salt on all the open wounds.
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Posted: Wed Feb 01, 2006 2:49 pm
Cool, thanks guys, thats my fav line too "in front of my eyes, not the back of my mind". lol.. well i've been brain-dead for a while.. e_e; im workin on somethin but it still doesn't.. feel right. I'll post it soon hopefully... *goes to change post title*
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Posted: Wed Feb 01, 2006 4:29 pm
Aye..... it can be a bit trying when you have an idea, and yet... you just can't seem to get it just right. <.<
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Posted: Thu Feb 02, 2006 8:02 pm
"No Need"
watch it unfold,
watch it flow, wrap itself around time,
chokes the earth as it grabs you by the hand
sittin' in the darkness,
lettin' the light creep out the door,
lettin' it hold you
keep it within you,
and shrug it off 'till you need it.
o.0 Okay.. So I don't even know what this is about. Lol
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2006 1:46 pm
"Don't Help Me'
Make my way into the endless abyss; light surrounds me as it pulls me back; leaving me breathless and on a high; running away back to the cold.
Whoo, lol it's real short, but i like it. cool
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Posted: Mon Feb 20, 2006 3:45 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 21, 2006 6:22 pm
"Too Much"
Wanna be there
but I need it too much
Wanna see you
but its too much to handle
Wanna hear you
but your voice has too much love
Wanna hold you
but you're already under my skin too much
Wanna reach out
but you've gone much too far
Wanna believe I should follow my insitincts
but life is too much
...since you've been gone
without you there, seeing, hearing, holding, reaching, loving...
...but I hurt too much.
PS PPLS--- I heart comments! Need suggestions! stare blaugh Heehee. >_>
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