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PostPosted: Sat Jan 01, 2011 6:19 pm


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So I have been writing since I was a fifth grader, and through the years, I've discovered that romances are my forte. Most of the time, I don't get too involved in love triangles because I find that sometimes the characters just some how develop a relationship that I wasn't going for.

Before anything else, I guess I have to tell you a little about my story. It starts off with this couple--Ally and Jake--and at first, there relationship is off to a great start! There are that couple that everyone admires. A couple years later, and it starts going downhill after Jake's life takes a turn for the worst. To solve his problems, he starts to drink ALOT and his emotions get all weirded up because of this. He starts to care less about Ally and more about forgetting the past. Another guy pops into Ally's life--Luke--and she just can't resist the thrill of being loved again. Blah, blah, blah. You get the point. In the end, Luke and Ally are supposed to end up together.

My problem is, that while I really want Ally and Luke together, I have to, at points in my story, have a couple romantic moments b/t Jake and Ally despite the final outcome. But while I'm writing about Jake and Ally, I just get so caught up in it, and then I can't get my mind off of Jake and Ally being a couple--and just like that, Luke is forgotten.

This has happened numerous times in my writing, and I just can't settle with one of them. It's been back and forth for so long and its hindering my writing. Any advice?






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PostPosted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 2:07 pm


I'm not entirely sure what you're aiming for with this love triangle, and I can't claim to be an expert on love troubles or triangles (Though I was good at trigonometry, badumcha!). The only advice I can think of is to try and write from experience, either your own or somebody else you know. If you don't have that kind of experience, try putting yourself in Amy's shoes.

To me, it seems that first, she'd feel guilty for even considering wanting another guy besides Jake. You're supposed to be loyal to the one you're with, no matter what. She might even feel like Jake needs her, due to his problems. Jake could be emotionally abusing her, saying things like "I'll die if I can't be with you," or "If you really loved me, you'd stay with me."

On the other hand, she's become friends with Luke, who's telling her that she deserves a better guy than Jake. He says that a man who loved her would want her to be happy, even at the expense of his own. Jake shouldn't be trying to make her feel guilty and that the moment Amy questions that she loves him, she ought to end the relationship.

Amy most likely listens to the advice, but doesn't take it. She tries not to think about it, because it makes her feel worse about herself. Jake's moods begin to swing from jealousy of all of Amy's guy friends, sorrow at making Amy feel bad, etc., etc. He still emotionally abuses her, but he might not be aware of it.

Jake and Amy could start fighting more often over insignificant things. It could be that one said something in a way that seemed snide, or the other left something out. An careless action or something, it doesn't have to be very big. It just has to get blown all out of proportion.

(Ehehe, I guess I knew more about this stuff than I thought. Most of this is from my last relationship, minus the other guy.)

I'll stop here, because it's really up to you how you do this. If I tell you what I think the character's are thinking, it'll become my own story. Just remember to write from experience, that's all.
 

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 07, 2011 6:30 pm


One of the main reasons love triangles are used in stories is to create conflict and tension. That is what makes the story interesting.

Therefore, don't just create a story that is boy meets girl, they live happily ever after ... BORING -- but instead throw in a bunch of problems.

In this case Luke is the character that introduces tension into the story and you should use him well. The later when Jake wins Amy back, after many trials, the reunion would be all the more sweet.
PostPosted: Sat Jan 15, 2011 10:28 am


Well...it depends on how you want the story to go.

I agree with what the other two said and I like the idea of how it might look like the end coupling with be her with Luke but in the end the original two work out their problems...although maybe it doesn't end super happy but that they got through the hardest bump in their road.

With that said, if you want the Luke relationship to be the one that works at the end...I think it is good to have moments were you get to see how Jake and Ally used to be so happy...in between all the horrible things that Jake puts her through now. Maybe you could even show Jake trying to face his issue in a better way only to fail because he was only "trying" so that she would stick around and tend to his every need or something. And then she realizes that she can't help the relationship if he isn't willing to try at all.

Granted, I think there should be something bad about Luke that makes her start to try to fix things with Jake a bit more...at some point. I mean...relationships start off pretty "perfect" at first so there would have to be a time to show that Luke and their relationship is fairy tail perfect but in the end it is what she really needs or whatever.
That's just my opinion...but yea. I hope that helps a bit. haha

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