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Posted: Mon Nov 15, 2010 9:12 pm
i reminisce of moments long past, of times long gone, from the seat of my park bench, watching the birds fly by a mountain of memories, a tower or cigarette butts from here to heaven's gate
they kept me at ease, a simple contentment to keep me satiated, keep my feet on the ground keep me working towards the next goal, tired and defeated, an un-efficient machine in an zero-tolerance world
i can only pray that i reach my dreams, so distant, like looking at the earth from outer space yet, also like our sweet, dying planet, my dreams become darker and dirtier the closer i get
but the only thing to do is to keep walking left then right, then left again, closing in on whatever lies ahead
that is all we know, to trudge along through the deep and chaotic nonsense to make do with gravity, eternally dragging us down with the setting sun
there is a young lady walking alone with her even younger daughter seemingly innocent and ignorant to the world passing them by
the mother, unaware that she has lost her face to conformity, and how she is condmemned by the world she lives in the daughter, unaware of the tendrils that society has implanted in her brain, destroying individualism at its roots
and myself, unaware of the moments still to come, with nothing to do but contemplate my nightmares abstract visions of this world, how it all pieces together, and how it inevitably tears itself apart
Caulfield Syndrome, seeing the stick in someone else's eye, without noticing the log in my own humanity is full of potential, yet we are cursed with overwhelming flaws, but who am i to cast blame?
alone, no lovers, no family, no friends without a hand to hold, or a shoulder to cry upon, only the wind and it's cool breeze caressing me
no time to waste with such subtleties like happiness, or love life is short, and when a machine's batteries last only so long, you must work them for what they have
society is warped and twisted, forcing the worst out of everyone, and locking the best away for guilt by association a generation, doomed by it's peers to be dominated by hatred and rising unemployment
there are reactions to our every action, divine force pulling us towards the abyss known only as "the great unknown" and here, on the cliff, we play catcher in the rye, stopping anyone we can, and failing miserably to save anyone at all
we must understand the harsh consequences of every atom our body comes into contact with every movement taking us towards that inevitable end. every step bringing us closer to the cliff
left, right, then left again, toeing the edge before darkness arrives and me, alone on my park bench, watching the birds fly by
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:42 pm
*cue drums* *cue guitar* How does it feel to treat me like you do when you've laid your hands upon me and told me who you are
I thought I was mistaken I thought I heard your words tell me how do I feel Tell me now do I feel?
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Sorry, just had to get that out of my system. Your siggy said Blue Monday, so I just couldn't help myself. 3nodding
Anyway, I really like where you're going with this thing. Keep the crazy train rollin'!
I guess the only thing about it that really bugged me was the line that started with "the daughter" - something just isn't jivin' there.
Other than that... yeah. It's just wonderfully dark and depressing all around. Maybe you could make it a little bit punchier, though?
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