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jings crivens

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 2:06 pm


Well, basically, I have had this idea for a long time, but I just don't know how to develop it. I have thought about it, altered it, revised it, and well.. it's not getting very far. I would hope to one day turn it into a novel.

My idea is based around the story of Joshua demolishing the town of Jericho.

THe main character is a boy called Joshua, funnily enough, He was born a twin, but his twin died at birth. His mother called his dead twin Jericho.

Now, Jericho is haunting Joshua through his dreams. She has watched her brother grow up, and wants him to join her in her world. The only way he can access this world is through dreaming. In his own world, he has always been the black sheep, his mum and dad are divorced and he wasn't popular in school. Joshua is torn between two worlds.

With my idea, I'm not sure if it's too vague, or if theres not enough to it. I just feel there's something not right, can you help ?
PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 2:29 pm


It sounds like it could be good, but I don't really get what it has to do with Joshua demolishing the town of Jericho. Also, Jericho strikes me as a boy's name.


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jings crivens

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 2:38 pm


well, about the story of joshua and jericho. Joshua faught the battle of Jericho and her walls came tumbling down and Jericho was no more.

When Jericho and Joshua were to be born, Jericho was supposed to be first, but something went wrong and Joshua came out before Jericho and she suffocated. So, Joshua tore down Jericho's walls. I know its not the most obvious of connections, but I have altered this alot from my original idea. I dont know, I kind of like the name Jericho for a girl, every time I imagine the name Jericho, I think of a girl.. Maybe it's just me.
PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 4:17 pm


I really like this idea. It's kind of creepy but really interesting!
But I don't know what help you might be asking for. What are you having trouble with?

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Chayce West

PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2010 4:37 pm


It's all fine and dandy, but I believe it's been done before. Actually, several times. The Thirteenth Tale by Diane Setterfield, The Unborn (film), etc, etc. Also, using their names as symbols....eh. Be careful there. Jericho and Joshua both have strong connotational meanings. Also, wouldn't it be better if it's Babylon and Jericho? They're both historic, biblical cities, so...idk. I think the idea needs to be fleshed out more, and add a little spice to it to make it more unique. Sorry if that sounded like recipe instructions there, haha XD. I hope this helped and has not caused any offense.
PostPosted: Fri Nov 05, 2010 10:25 am


hahaa yeah, thanks chayce. Thats what I mean, I didn't know what it was it just felt... off and I didnt know why. Maybe I should add more body to the plot and fatten it out a bit.. thanks smile

jings crivens

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The_Sky_Scarred_Black

PostPosted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 10:30 am


If you want to brainstorm for ideas, feel free to message me on an instant messenger or Gaia Chat. I find it faster to use those when brainstorming or debating.
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