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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 6:52 pm
Tonight we all are gathered here To mourn the loss of one so dear. A life cut short before its time, A new name in the devils rhyme. Tonight we've come to say farewell, When we'll meet next, we can't tell. The hymns are sung, the tears are cried, We'll see you on the other side.
An empty place where you once stood, Your name carved on a cross of wood. Something has been lost tonight, An innocence, a smile, a light. A life now gone, a heartbeat stilled, An emptiness that can't be filled. So raise your glasses high, my friends, We don't know when this story ends.
This life, it passes by so fast, So short it is, first breath to last. Standing here beside your grave, Asking God your soul to save. Why He took you, we don't know, Why He chose to lay you low, Why out of us all, you were lost, And we remain to bear the cost.
It is not for us to ask Him why, All here tonight will someday die. From dust we came, to dust return, This life is but a brief sojourn. So say goodbye, then walk away, There's nothing more that we can say. Forgive us all for we have sinned, We are but candles in the wind. Feedback would be lovely; *CC even more so. *Constructive Criticism
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Posted: Thu Oct 28, 2010 8:37 pm
There's nothing wrong with it. It's a perfect piece of writing! And I loved it by the way! Keep doing this this way, and I'll be your fan till the day I die.
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