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Deafening the Silence

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PostPosted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 10:16 am


So here is my attempt at this prompt... I was doing fairly well, but then... Just came to a halt becuase I honestly can't figure out what would happen. Hopefully I can add more to it later when more inspiration hits, but I almost doubt it.







I really never wanted this job. The screaming, pooping, fighting, crying, gooping, is just not my style. But I took it anyways because I know it will look good on college applications in the future. There are more kids here today than normal. Usually, the day care only cares for about 20 kids, but I can’t even begin to count all the little heads buzzing around my knees.

I sit in the corner with a little Asian boy, playing with cars going around in circles. He can’t talk yet, but gets angry when I pick up the wrong color of car. A small girl comes up to me and sits in my lap. I haven’t seen her before, but she looks really familiar. Her hair is thick and so blonde it’s almost white. She cups her hands over her mouth and leans up to my ear.

“Tell me a story?” She whispers before sitting back in my lap and staring at me, just waiting for an adventure to spill out of my mouth.

The Asian boy has run off to play with someone else, his attention span gone with the wind. I contemplate what kind of story to tell this kid. I’m no writer, and when I read it’s books about vampires slaughtering cities and books about dream-boy-music-stars who care only for themselves and not the music.
PostPosted: Fri Oct 29, 2010 11:03 pm


I love the word gooping, but what is gooping.

Love the imagery, love the personality that you have given the characters of your story.

I can't wait for you to continue/finish this story.
Maybe attempt to retell that fairy tale you remember your mom telling you when you were young. "Once upon a time" but you've forgotten how a lot of it goes. To make up for that, you try to incorperate the elements of books you've read lately to keep the story flowing and not too much "pretty unicorn in a field of flowers with barbie" type of story. So you get something of a make shift fairy tale that uses more young single adult aspects in a kid friendly bed time fairy tale setting.
(Definetly something you can dump in the Imagination Generator thread for others to read)

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 05, 2010 5:44 pm


Very good so far. I can't wait to read the rest of it. What is gooping by the way. I saw it and was like 0.0

Also don't forget to add the sentence "It was so hot (cold or rainy) that...
Keep it up, and maybe you can win 5k.
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