I always write littile poems that suck when i try to elaborate on them. like-
I sit with the silence ringing in my ears,
Only punctuated with mother nature's cries.
The plaintive thunder breaks my solitude,
and though i laugh at the thought
of thunder keeping me company,
for now its just thunderr and me.
when i try and elaborate it is horrible. i have other poems like that.
The mirrror is so picky in what it sees,
Showing only the best or worse of me.
It never shows my true reflection,
THe girl hiding beneath detection.
or
Tell me not to dance in the rain,
Tell me you won't cause me pain.
Make promises you can't keep,
Deprive me of hours of sleep.
Hunt my dreams constantly,
and whisper how great we can be.
Feed me lies and compliments,
Till nothing makes sense.
Make me love you,
Though i dont want to.
when i tried to extend it i got-
Laugh merrily as you break me down,
taking my heart and leaving town.
THen act as if you care,
When you see his hungry stare.
When i move on, as i will,
Make me think you love me still,
If you ever love me at all
you'll not make me make this fall.
which i dont like. any advice?
I sit with the silence ringing in my ears,
Only punctuated with mother nature's cries.
The plaintive thunder breaks my solitude,
and though i laugh at the thought
of thunder keeping me company,
for now its just thunderr and me.
when i try and elaborate it is horrible. i have other poems like that.
The mirrror is so picky in what it sees,
Showing only the best or worse of me.
It never shows my true reflection,
THe girl hiding beneath detection.
or
Tell me not to dance in the rain,
Tell me you won't cause me pain.
Make promises you can't keep,
Deprive me of hours of sleep.
Hunt my dreams constantly,
and whisper how great we can be.
Feed me lies and compliments,
Till nothing makes sense.
Make me love you,
Though i dont want to.
when i tried to extend it i got-
Laugh merrily as you break me down,
taking my heart and leaving town.
THen act as if you care,
When you see his hungry stare.
When i move on, as i will,
Make me think you love me still,
If you ever love me at all
you'll not make me make this fall.
which i dont like. any advice?
