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PostPosted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 5:07 pm


It was a early morning when Sasuke woke up with a anxious feeling, he quickly got dressed then ran through the door not caring if he had bedhead or even looked messy,and as soon as he steped outside he noticed it was raining.
' There's something wrong, i feel like there's something wrong with Naruto' Sasuke rushed really fast just to get to Naruto's house. This feeling of abandoness and hatred was too great for Sasuke too let go. He knew something was wrong with Naruto because his secret love for the blonde was so over whelming that sometimes he knew when Naruto was lonely, sad, or even mad.
Sasuke was standing in front of Naruto's house now, but he couldn't feel Naruto's presence anywhere near the shadowed house, he ran up the stairs when he was faced the door, he couldn't bring him self to open the simple door because he was afraid that horrible happened to the love of his life.
Then when Sasuke opened the door his stomach began to twist, the place was covered in red words-
"hatred" , "life sucks" ,and lots more. But out of all of them there was one that was written about him- "He always takes away my dreams"
It was kinda true because the girl of Naruto's dream was Sakura and she loved Sasuke. Naruto's dream of becoming hokage was gonna be smashed because he over heard the elders saying that they were gonna make Sasuke the future hokage.
Then Sasuke saw a note on the table-
To: whoever reads this
I Naruto Uzumaki have no reason to live on, my dreams have faded away, my lfe has no meaning,and so I am running away. Don't search for me.
P.s if this is Sasuke reading this then i hope you know what you've done to me. you took everything away. I hate your guts.
From naruto

Hot tears rolled down Sasuke's face, there was nothing he could do Naruto was gone and it was all his fault. His legs began to move on it's own, he ran out the door without knowing where he was going,and everything was just blurring behind him as he ran.
run run run
run run run
run run run

Sasuke stopped right in front of Konoha's gates and there in standing in the cold rain was a boy in orange.
"Naruto? is that you?"
Sasuke took a few steps closer to him.
"Naruto, Dobe are you okay?" Sasuke reached his hand out to touch Naruto but Naruto slapped it away.
" Sasuke i hate you, leave me alone, can't you understand that i'm leaving for good"
Naruto's words stung Sasuke.
" Naruto, why are you doing this?"
" I've tryed to be perfect but nothing was worth it.......now i realize it doesn't makes me real..... because of you Sasuke i'll never believe."
They both stood still, it seemed like time was frozen and it was just them were moving.
" Naruto don't leave"
Naruto was walking slowly away.
" Naruto please don't leave"
Each step Naruto took was tearing Sasuke's heart.
"Sasuke......"
" Yes Naruto?"
"Shut up"
Then everything seemed to skip.....
SKIP SKIP SKIP
Sasuke ran up behind Naruto and his arms were around his waist......
SKIP SKIP SKIP
The rain trickled down their faces....
SKIP SKIP SKIP
" Don't leave....... I L-love you Naru-to! From the first time i met you, i loved your smile and the way your so bright........your the only person who brought colour to my world.......Don't leave me because your all i want, all that i'll ever need,and your something i'll always love......."
Sasuke's words echoed in Naruto's mind
I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU Naruto turned around and pressed his lips againest the uchiha's lips. Passion, love, confusion,and hatred twisted in their hearts.
" Runaway with me" Naruto whispered
" What?" The kiss that Naruto gave Sasuke made him dizzy.
" Runaway.......with me Sasuke..." Those words that escape Naruto's month made Sasuke's world twist in excitment.
" Yes......yes.....i will......i love you Naruto"
Sasuke's arms wraped around the soaked blonde and then their lips met again. Naruto's warm lips was pressed againest Sasuke's. But this kiss was different because it was true. Then there hands met, griping each other so they won't let go........ever.
" I love you too Sasuke" Naruto's blue eyes made Sasuke sway.
Without hesitation they ran into the murky mist of rain leaving behind the Konoha's gates.


Five years later.........

Naruto opened his eyes and he saw right beside him was a beautiful raven haired boy who he loved deeply. Naruto's hand ran throught Sasuke's silky hair and in his softest words he whispered to the sleeping uchiha-
" I love you too Sasuke..." Then he slowly difted back to a peaceful sleep.
PostPosted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 6:54 pm


that was a very nice short story! i noticed a couple grammatical and word usage errors, but the story itself was nice! 3nodding i would love another story from you! blaugh

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 9:04 pm


well it is my first story..........aleast i tryed
PostPosted: Sun Sep 12, 2010 7:21 am


puremoon100
well it is my first story..........aleast i tryed

oh i know, it was still very good. it helps to have an editor go over it, like a friend. they can notice things that you dont because you wrote it. my first yaoi was bad until my friend read it for me, and she gave me lots of tips on how to get the story to flow better. 3nodding

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 12, 2010 6:23 pm


i admit i suck at writing...........believe me
PostPosted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 7:47 am


puremoon100
i admit i suck at writing...........believe me


hahaha, you just have to practice! blaugh

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PostPosted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 3:40 pm


but i do have lots of ideas for storie........ twisted i have the best yaoi ideas ever
PostPosted: Fri Sep 17, 2010 6:50 pm


puremoon100
but i do have lots of ideas for storie........ twisted i have the best yaoi ideas ever

so write them!! if you do, you can get better. it was mainly your grammar errors, so try writing it in word to get those fixed before you post it on here. 3nodding

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 20, 2010 6:46 pm


i wouldn't mind seeing them either smile
PostPosted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 1:05 am


I would read them!I luv yaoi fics! heart practice till u get really good! 4laugh

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 7:38 am


Thanks everyone for your support and comfort!!!!! blaugh
PostPosted: Mon Oct 11, 2010 1:43 pm


that.....was.....AWESOME =3

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