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PostPosted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 8:26 pm


Beginning


In a lab that was below the Organization's XIII castle, Some scientist were studying the different time lines of certain worlds that weren't notice by normal travelers.

"How's it going with the analyzation?" A scientist said in a white coat with glasses

"W-we're not sure if we can keep up of the Black Holes inside the fracture of time, I'm sorry sir but this is getting very difficult for even us the investigate." Another scientist shorter than the other one.

The scientist with glasses picked the little on up with his fist. "Listen to me! If we can't find a way to figure to coding between each timezone...then how are we going to be able to go anywhere?" he said then throwing the little scientist down on the ground.

"Sir! We've reached one!" he said pointing to the central processor unit showing a black hole between the fracture of time near the Castle.

The scneitist with glasses came by to look and he gave off a weird look which was him normally shocked like the other scientist gathering over.

"It can't be..I-it's growing and increasing growth capacity.." scientist #1 said while other scientist started complaining and arguing over it.

"Quiet! I want all of you to be quiet and get back to work!!!" he shouted angrily and sighed with a headache then turned around and was ordering them around. "You! I want you to locate the current place it at now! You over there! I want you to help this one track it down! Short one! I want you to stop lallygagging and find the current size,speed,strength,Velocity! the rest fo you! Search for any more nearby or away! there has got to be more of them somewhere!" he said having two veins showing on his forehead at each side.

The scientist were clicking and pressing the correct organize codes to make sure they are not losing it by the littlest of seconds. 5 of them activated a beam for their materialization to transport their body towards the the black hole though carrying some equipment to be destroyed into oblivion or be dematerialized into pieces of microscopic particles.

The beam fired up and send some test subject towards the black hole, when they arrived they was at the center of it which appeared to be a gigantic moon in the shape of a heart. "No....it can't be...it's..not spiraling...it's exhausting..." he said as one of the scientist which was the one in the glasses press the button to the intercom and speaks. "You got to get out of there! We are not to touch it at all!" he said but a large static came form it which mean that they were already sucked in and gone.

The scientist took off his glasses with a sigh and turned around. "My fellow scientist....It been a honor working with you because.....We have just found a warp hole in the fabric of time!" he said as the other scientist cheered in Happiness and Glory for their success.


Awakened


The sounds and images appear inside the mind of a boy with sorrow anger and hate also some black things moving and clawing something. In a minute, It was a boy named Reen who woke up from a hideous nightmare of Heartless.

"Argh....Tsk...again..I have that dream again.." he said to himself as he stood up and looked around the street he was in near a tower in The World That Never Was as it started to rain.

"Man...It's raining..." He said as he looked around wondrously as he could see some shadows in the alleyways. "Who's there?" he said pushing his head outward to see.

As he looked the shadow there started to move and came out of the alley and it was some neo-shadows. "What the heck?!" he said shocked.

The shadows started to run after Reen though this was before he even got a Keyblade yet till now. "Yikes! Somebody help!" he said trying to run from them but they were gaining on him.

"OH NO!" he said as he reached a dead it and one of the heartless dashes a claw at him and just by luck, He first materialized his Keyblade in front of him the blocked and pushed the neo-shadow away.

Reen opened his eyes from fear and was in shock for looking at the mysterious keyblade that appeared in his hand. "So....this...is a keyblade." he said under his breath then calmed himself down then ready's himself to fight. "C'mon you weak little things!" he said taunting them and all 4 of them ran at him starting to attack then he started to swing it randomly at them but mostly missed them but got a few hits at them making them back away a little.

"Yeah! you better run!" he said as he was continuing to swing it and the neo-shadows ran away into the darkness of nowhere.

"Weird......but who cares" he said laughing a little and dematerialized his keyblade and walked away smiling.



Slayer


The sounds of chains rattling and keyblades hitting on something came from a place near a very tall building.

"Ha! Got one!" Reen said as he swung it at the face of a Heartless and continued cutting down one by one.

"Man...this is too easy for me..though some have been quite tough.." he said thinking to himself as he blocked each Heartless and Nobody with his blade and counterattacked them with a heavy blow to the face or the back.

"Okay! Now it's getting to difficult!" He said alerted as they starting to grab ahold of his keyblade, so he jumped back and tried to escape.

As he tried to run, there were already nobodies in his way so he couldn't escape from them. "Awww nuts..." he said till he decided to run towards the tall building and walked inside of it.

As he explores it he looked around with a amazed look. "WOW....so interesting this place is.." he said to himself as he came cross to a silver door and opened it up with a loud creak and he came to a control room with bright buttons and lights.

"Cool....." he said in shock with a big smile and walked towards the control pad and press one buttom. When he pressed it a big machine lit up in lights and charged some purple electrivity at the point aiming downward.

"Hmmm.....What is this?" he said to himself as he approached the beam and when he touched it, a big flash came at his eyes while trying very hard to blink but in a second. He was already someone else but seemed equal to the place he was at but slightly different.

Reen saw a person with black hair but was really spikey that seemed almost like him.

"Who are you?" he said to the mysterious person and the being that looks like Reen.


(Still getting there......|Feel free to comment or question certain parts [Positive comments only..]|)
PostPosted: Wed May 25, 2011 1:58 pm


I thought it was a pretty ok story. You need some work done, like everybody else (including me). First of all, in the first section, I got confused as to which scientist was doing what. I didn't know if scientist #1 was the short one or the mean one.

Secondly, I thought the second section moved a bit too fast/akwardly. I don't know how to describe it, but it didn't seem right to me.

Thirdly, the third section. We just find ourselves in the middle of the fight, not knowing how much time has passed.

Overall, it was a good story. I liked it and I hope to see more from you. ::")

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PostPosted: Wed May 25, 2011 5:11 pm


Yeah I know, but scientist #1 was the short one, and the other scientist were figuring out to the key of traveling through time, which links to Reen's story.

Yeah when I read it, I must have made a mistake somewhere in the second section.

And third section, is just a couple of days later, and also when he learned about his...other self..
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