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 Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 5:58 am
not to pull something that would hinder the pace of the story but....
I accept that Seu is definitely a star-gazer but I don't think even she would put herself on a situation where she's half awake in the middle of a campaign.
No matter that she really doesn't like whom they're doing it for, it would still be a campaign and I'd think she'd have more self-pride to be caught unguarded by sleep.... soldiers who do that tend to die on the first day.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 10:55 pm
Good point. Like I said, it needs work. I"ll have to do something with that then.
Changing it doesn't really hinder anything. In one of my earlier drafts she was perfectly awake and aware, and she still got caught. So I'll just change it back. It was just the way it came out as I wrote it.
I'll change that when I edit that portion. but until then I"ll put up the next one, because it doesn't have anything really to do with that except a few things, which she does any way regardless of the draft.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 11:25 pm
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Posted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 6:07 am
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