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 Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 8:13 am
Curse Of Fate
I was born under an unlucky star,
a curse of fate,
I cause pain and suffering to everyone around me,
everyone i love and cherish.
they fight,they swear, they get hurt,they cry.
it's my fault,
it's always my fault.
I just want to protect them...
but I have to protect them from myself.
I push them away
become a lone star,
my heart breaks
repeatedly,
this isn't enough,
I'm hurting myself and them now
theres no escape,
I am trapped by the iron bars of destiny
chained by my future,
burned and tortured by my past,
and trampled on by my emotions,
I carry on alone,
surviving as a light in the darkness,
alone,
pushing the pain away,
trying to cope with my worries
and the troubles of everyone else...
could I be anymore unlucky?
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Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 9:36 am
i don't mean to be rude or anything like that, but the poetry forum is at the top; if you want to post your poetry, click on the link at the top where it says POETRY
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Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 10:28 am
oh i know^_^ but so many poems were posted here i didnt think it would be a problem, im sorry if it is ^_^
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Posted: Wed Aug 04, 2010 11:30 am
Don't worry about 2pound. Even if he was being polite, he's not a crew member and shouldn't be worrying bout where you post your poetry. I usually move it into the POETRY subforum sooner or later any ways, its not like you'll get in trouble any ways.
^_^
ANY WHO... I loved the emotion in this poem. If it were to be writen slightly differant (not the wording, but the spacing) it might give a differant, less chaotic feel - unless thats what you were going for.
^_^
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Posted: Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:20 pm
Amazingly strong, in fact I can actaully relate to this, it's something that i can connect with my life. I really like this poem1 Good job! ^.^
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Posted: Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:51 pm
thanks for the comments ^_^.I wasnt really sure what type of flow I was going for, I just sort of typed it and it ended up that way^_^ but chaotic seems like a good discription. I'm really glad you liked it, ^_^ I was hoping people could relate to it^_^.
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