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Rosalyn Azubarith



Whip: A whip that is coiled securely around the hips until put into use. The whip is a fine work of craftsmanship made from the highest quality of kangaroo hide and beautifully braided to allow the most subtle of motions from the wrist command it accurately. The end of the whip if loaded with lead making it an effective bludgeoning device as well. Length of the whip is about six feet.

Perfectly acceptable.


Jambiya: Another beautiful work of craftsmanship, the double-edged steel blade is housed is an ornate silver sheath attached to her belt. The blade extends about six and a half inches while the decorated hilt of bone and silver is another six inches.

Perfectly acceptable.


Strength: Rosalyn possesses a high level of strength compared to a similar human. Her crushing strength is very impressive, capable of crushing small rocks in the palm of her hand. Her lifting strength is also very impressive, capable of lifting upwards to five hundred pounds with a bit of effort. and having a maximum of about eight hundred pounds Her legs are equally as strong, as she is capable of covering substantial distances in a single bound, jumping vertically from a standing position up to ten feet and the front thrust of her kick compares in lethality to that of an ostrich.

Looking at this, my first instinct is to break it down into manageable small ABILITIES or PHYSICAL POWERS. For example, crushing strength is not exactly indicative of a person's overall strength, and the degrees of her power in this field would dictate whether her ability to crush things should be considered a PHYSICAL POWER or an ABILITY. Xena in Goldeneye for example could be said to have the PHYSICAL POWER to crush people using various parts of her body. *Cough*

The lifting power, for example, is something that I would put into STRENGTH alone. In this case I think that her overall strength with those sorts of numbers is a bit too high given her size and AGILITY. It's not that it doesn't make sense for devils to haver enhanced power or anything like that, just that I feel as though her STRENGTH is outside of STANDARD in this case because it doesn't detract from AGILITY.

Finally, when it comes to her jumping power and movement I would consider this either an ABILITY ( for the jumping ) or AGILITY ( for the movement benefits and implied dexterity). It's hard to say exactly where this should go, but I think it's safe to say that it fits with the above. If she wanted to be able to jump around and be quick and AGILE, I think at this level it would have to come at a cost of some of her impressive STRENGTH.



Agility: Rosalyn is not among the elite of demons in speed, but her performance compares to most Olympic runners.

Covered above, more or less.

Endurance: Rosalyn possesses a moderate level of endurance compared to other demons. She has a very high level of pain tolerance, this being paired with a somewhat twisted personality. She can also sustain intensive levels of physical activity for periods upwards to three hours before feeling fatigued. Overall, her body can handle large amounts of stress and punishment before actually failing.

Well, she's awesome in bed. I mean, you can abuse her for hours and she won't quit. I think that the pain part falls into acceptable PHYSICAL POWER because she basically translates pain to pleasure or ignores it as a common hazard. Alternatively, I think that her overall fortitude and ability to keep going would either be a bump up in CON to the detriment of INT, or a PHYSICAL POWER all its own. ( this could ICly reflect that she simply spends so much time fu-uh, feeding, that she doesn't need to pursue intellectual things with as much, uh, vigor. )

Healing: While wounds can still slow her down, Rosalyn possesses an increased healing factor. Mortal wounds may not be recovered from, but deep lacerations that normally take about five days to a week to heal may heal as fast as two to three days with no physical signs of scarring. The increased healing of wounds consumes a larger portion of her energy and decreases the minimum time needed for refueling.

Same thoughts as other between-fight healing abilities regarding the GTB. I feel as though they are uneccesary.

Drawback: Rosalyn is at the peak of her abilities after consuming energy from a victim. She has a minimum requirement of drawing energy from prey at least once each quarter and may find herself performing below her peak levels as time goes on with out a sufficient supply of energy. Another drawback to her racial properties is the additional damage dealt by holy based attacks and weapons that are blessed by priests, white mages, or other such classes.

I feel this is extraneous, because no one really expects you to come to the GTB at anything less than your peak. That, and no one expects that a bombshell like this is going to have any troubles finding a man to feed from. That being said, the extra damage from holy sources is an important part of balancing your character which is taken gladly.


Fire Resist: Rosalyn has a natural resistance to fire and heat, and usually only under the most extreme of circumstances (like a lava bath) would it be an effective means of harming her.

I feel as though almost having fire immunity should be an ABILITY that counts against EQUIPMENT. Luckily, Rosalyn has very little in the way of EQUIPMENT. To put it into perspective if her fire resistance had been towards spiritual fire, I think it would be inappropriate for her to come in wearing a suit designed to be fireproof against mundane heat. Additionally, I think that because she is a devil this ABILITY is in line with her character, and isn't stressed or included just for the sake of a tactical edge.


Ku: Ku is the demon variant of chi. and the foundation for the majority of Rosalyn's techniques. Ku is summoned internally and can be considered their "life energy". Continuous use of the energy source shortens the minimum requirement time necessary for refueling by draining a victim and it can also be taxing on an individual when channeled excessively in short periods.

This is very vague and would require expanded definition - not to mention I think that cutting down on the time between feedings shouldn't count as an acceptable limiter. The reason I say that is because if we assume its easy to be rested and healed up between rounds, weaknesses like saying you need to heal or rest up sooner becomes... moot.


Hypnosis: Looking directly into the eyes of a target for an uninterrupted period of ten seconds, Rosalyn can use a heightened form of suggestion to have a victim act according to her will. She can not use this technique to suggest an individual do something that they would not do under anything that would violate the values held in the subconscious. Such limitations may include suicide and murdering a loved one, but these limitations may be lifted if an individual may entertain the idea, and perhaps half heatedly accept it as a possibility. The hypnotic effect loses its hold once Rosalyn's concentration and visual connection through the eyes is disrupted.

I would consider this completely within the realm of STANDARD SPELLPOWER. My only further notes would be on the fact that most people would try and shunt the effect ICly, or that the prerequisite 10 seconds of uniterrupted eye contact will probably never be made. D:

Soul Drain: Primary technique used to absorb energy from a victim. Energy drained is "negative energy" and can take the form, but is not limited to, lust, malicious intent, or envy. To drain energy from a victim Rosalyn must be making physical contact and be able to suck energy from it. This would include anything from the mouth or an open wound. Absorbing energy immediately allows her to regain her strength and satisfies the quarterly requirement, all dependent on amount of energy taken in. Effects on the victim usually include fatigue, dizziness, and a loss of aggression.

ABILITY, not one that I think would see a lot of success. To that end I would consider it within acceptable STANDARD, though, again I need to mention the energy req being more or less extraneous to me. The effects of her attack aren't nearly as lethal as the initial name implies, and the ability requires a solid grappling base in addition to already having made wounds ( or at least getting to french kiss them )


Hellfire: The physical manifestation of Rosalyn's Ku as a projectile or augment. The flames it produces hold similar properties to any normal flame. Used as an augment, the field of flames is focused around a specific point and maintains itself for a short period. Used as a projectile, the flames explode out in a fireball similar in effect to holding using a can of spray in conjunction with a lighter. Damage from burns a consistent with wounds caused by flames.

My opinion on this ability is that it's too vague. Being able to augment your weapons or attacks with hellfire should be considered SPELLPOWER, especially when you can throw it as projectiles. While the damage values of this seem to be pretty low ( bursts of flame from an aeresol can for example ) there is no listed energy cost or other limits. It requires a little more definition, but doesn't seem to be too powerful or even outside of STANDARD.


Fire Breath: Rosalyn is capable of sustaining a stream of flames from her mouth, or is able to produce clouds of smoke. The duration of the flame depends on controlled breathing, a similar idea to holding an extended note with an instrument. The length of the flame is dependent on how fast she blows, but the maximum extension is about six feet. Generally speaking, the largest flame is the shortest duration and a very short flame normally doesn't last much longer. The most effective flame range is by far the medium intensity of about four feet, and can normally be sustained for around thirty seconds in a single full breath. Smoke follows the same rules except that the breath does not have to be continuous. because of this, Rosalyn is capable of releasing balls or rings of smokes at varying sizes and varying intervals as long as she maintains holding the single breath.

While the perverted implications are truly horrifying, this ABILITY does not seem to be too overpowered. The power suggests ways she can do it and lengths she can do it for, but these are reliant on factors that can easily be changed in battle. Being able to breath continually uninterrupted, for example. I'd want some clarification on how strong the fire is, but this otherwise seems okay.

Hot Touch: By focusing her Ku to a single point, Rosalyn can gradually increase the temperature of the desired part of her body or some weapons. The intensity of the burning increases in three stages. The first stage can be compared to a hot washcloth on an aching muscle, a pleasurable feeling. The second stage can be compared to handling a steering wheel that has sat in the sun for several hours, a very uncomfortable and stinging sensation. The final stage can be compared to placing a hand on a hot stove top, a painful and potentially severe burn. This ability must progress in the order of first or final grade, but breaking the focus may cancel it immediately.

I would pretty much put this under SPELLPOWER, but again, one that is limited enough in its scope that I don't have any problems considering it within STANDARD.

Widow Maker: This ability can be considered the follow up to the hot touch. Rosalyn pushes out the energy that has been concentrated to a single area which creates an explosion. The strength of the attack is entirely dependent on the energy that has been channeled into the hot touch ability. This follow up can only be used on the second level of hot touch and above. At the first grade of widow maker, the explosion would be equivalent in power to landing a digging punch. The second grade could be compared to stomping on an individual with her full weight. The final grade of widow maker requires an additional "fourth charge" to the hot touch. This grade is where the name of the attack comes from because of its lethality. The final grade of the widow maker causes severe internal damage to a victim, including the breaking of bone and destruction of organs and tissue. The widow maker is an exclusively close range attack, losing at least 75 percent of its power just three inches away from the target and becoming completely ineffective at distances greater than five inches.

While an apparent fusion of SPELLPOWER and PHYSICAL ABILITY, this move doesn't go either way too far. The reqs for its use are completely fair, as are its limitations. In its ultimate form this is a very powerful ability and its even pretty good as it scales up, but its nothing that an average fighter shouldn't be able to work against.


Deflect: A defensive variant of the window maker. By quickly pushing out a small amount of her Ku, while striking Rosalyn can cancel out small to medium-sized energy projectiles or stop small projectiles such as knives and rocks. This ability will not be effective on canceling out strong projectiles and large physical projectiles such as boulders. This ability can be used with any strike from the body and can also be used with any strike from a weapon at the projectile.

ABILITY, not too bad, either. I think this is completely fair.


Scorching Lash: Rosalyn can have her Ku travel through a weapon in hand, normally her whip, to produce a projectile type attack similar to the hellfire technique.

More SPELLPOWER type stuff, any issues with this in particular are going to be involved in the personal note at the bottom.

Phantom Slice: By sending her Ku through a weapon Rosalyn can create invisible projectiles in the shape of the swing that travel directly forward. The projectiles can travel at speeds up to sixty miles per hour and can travel distances up to fifty feet. For every teen feet that the projectile travels it loses twenty percent of its original power. Upper limits of this can slash through objects on par with some of the finest katana crafted. This ability can only be used once per post. The amount of Ku required to create a blade of the size can be quickly taxing if used excessively.

This ABILITY is all and all too powerful for GTB STANDARD ( in my opinion ). At least, too powerful given all its possible uses. The power declines as the range increases, but almost all GTB fighters will be well within the lethal range when fighting against this technique. While the once a post limit is good, its only a bandaid on a bullet wound. The fact that the projectile is invisible as well, makes it almost as scary as bringing in a gun... a gun that shoots swords.

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My overall opinion on this is that it could use a rigid energy system. If there was an energy system that outlined how much power each attack uses and how much power she has at any given time, I feel as though the vagueness of the abilities and her overall power could be cleaned up nicely. As it stands, I would rate Rosalyn sexy unacceptable for STANDARD, barring a few minor revisions and some further explanation.

Haelstrom Fist says:
*http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9YQO86p0kJU So if I added this to Omi's profile,
*He'd meet the standard, right?

KB says:
*HAEL.

Haelstrom Fist says:
*RIGHT!?

KB says:
*The answer is yes.

Haelstrom Fist says:
*Good.
*[Pose.]