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 Posted: Thu Jul 01, 2010 8:50 am
So now that I know that Vintrict was the second judge...
May I kindly ask for the judge's commentary on the fight?
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Posted: Thu Jul 01, 2010 8:11 pm
Nightsnow So now that I know that Vintrict was the second judge...
May I kindly ask for the judge's commentary on the fight? What he said...but add my stuff instead...I sort of want to know what killed my points so I don't make the same mistake twice!
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2010 7:43 pm
If you won a fight by K.O would your fight still be scored? If so can I receive my scores?
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2010 7:48 pm
Nightsnow So now that I know that Vintrict was the second judge...
May I kindly ask for the judge's commentary on the fight? People don't know how to shut their mouths! Anywho... Snow v.s Rylen Spelling/ Grammar 5 - 5 Conciseness/ Writing Ability 3.5 - 5 You and I have known one another for a while, Snow. You have went around this site, roleplaying and fighting, and participating in the GTB for a while now. And during judgments, there was some things I said about your writing, for example, when you use to do a lot of interpersonal diction that made it seem like you were more oocly talking than icly. And then you got better over the years.
However, for some reason, your writing still troubles me. I don't know whether it's the passive nature of your character or just how you are casual with the way you roleplay...or maybe because I'm just expecting too much out of you, but your posts are still somewhat "battle orientated." You put a lot of heart into your posts, but to me, I don't think you're writing them in the right way. The better way to say it, cause this is about writing NOT roleplaying, your posts need to flow better. They shouldn't break at absurd moments. It's like, I'm reading, expecting the climax of the built up situation, then suddenly, you switch to another move, or situation that doesn't relate with the previous sentences at all, unless it's starting a new paragraph.Roleplaying 4 - 5 The writing section somewhat affected this, because, yet again, the writing feels more battle orientated.
Creativity/ Strategy
3 - 5
I think I told you this before, Snow, but you have your character remain defensive way too often. From every fight you play, your character has the oddest moments of picking up speed, but never gains momentum in a natural way. I feel like he can do so much more, yet you weren't giving it to us in a fashionable way. He was duel wielding two katanas: he had the advantage over the unarmed wolf, yet, you kept your character back out of harm's way. You should have used more of an active fighting style to gain the momentum early. You have two swords and can easily overcome someone without weapons.
Control of the Fight
3 - 4
18.5 - 24
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2010 7:50 pm
Imperatore Scellerato If you won a fight by K.O would your fight still be scored? If so can I receive my scores? Normally, fights won by KOs aren't scored unless they're a double KO. However, in my opinion due to reading your fight, you did okay upon all areas. One thing I think you lack, however, is that your character doesn't stand out too much like other characters. Maybe it's because you're new here, but there's no "voice" that I can see from your character yet, which is hard to implement unless you get some social moments in. Use your fight to get the readers to learn a little about Vrael.
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Posted: Sat Jul 03, 2010 4:46 pm
Cirby [ I'm pretty satisfied with my result. ]
[ I'd like a little breakdown for developmental purposes though. ]
[ Please and thank you. ] [ Or if anyone knows who the third judge was I can just go to him. ]
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