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AikoNae

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Posted: Sun May 23, 2010 11:06 am

this is a drawing of me so plz comment and criticize my drawing

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i know it sux but it was done with a mouse redface

any help on mistakes will be appreciated plz

Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 3:17 pm

the artwork is good, considering you used a mouse with it. Using a mouse restricts you from making smooth curves and line connections, which explains some of the elements in your artwork.

How long did you make this? and how long have you been practicing with a mouse?

In terms of body proportions, i find the raised arm a bit longer(?) than supposed to be and I have mistaken the hand (in the mid area) an accessory. and her breast should be pointing lower than that...and the feet a bit more longer and flat.

err...i guess this is better explained with red lines? would it be okay?

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Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 3:33 pm

it took me 10 minutes actually i had to draw it in my sketch book i dont have a scanner so i got it as close as i could...for the mouse i guess 1 month biggrin .... i would be ok with red lines so i can see better where the mistake(s) are thank you for you help and check back in DTAAY forum i posted a relpy

Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 4:08 pm

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it took me 10 minutes actually i had to draw it in my sketch book i dont have a scanner so i got it as close as i could...for the mouse i guess 1 month biggrin .... i would be ok with red lines so i can see better where the mistake(s) are thank you for you help and check back in DTAAY forum i posted a relpy

10 mins? hmm, i suggest you invest more time with your art if you want it to be better (i know you can 3nodding ), but im guessing this is just a practice shot?. 1 month, that's good, keep it up and you'll master the mouse (be careful of hand aches tho) ^^;

I'll post the red lines in a jiffy ^^

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Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 4:18 pm

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it took me 10 minutes actually i had to draw it in my sketch book i dont have a scanner so i got it as close as i could...for the mouse i guess 1 month biggrin .... i would be ok with red lines so i can see better where the mistake(s) are thank you for you help and check back in DTAAY forum i posted a relpy

10 mins? hmm, i suggest you invest more time with your art if you want it to be better (i know you can 3nodding ), but im guessing this is just a practice shot?. 1 month, that's good, keep it up and you'll master the mouse (be careful of hand aches tho) ^^;

I'll post the red lines in a jiffy ^^

thank you for taking the time to do so whee those head aches are a pain lol i usally take a longer time on it but i want to time myself on a decent drawing i guess sweatdrop i cant wait for the red lines biggrin

Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 4:29 pm

its not much, your anatomy was okay-only a few tweaks- but i hope it helps smile

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I lessened the visibility of the art to make the red lines clearer.

looking at it now...mine isnt that perfect. confused

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Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 4:38 pm

your right about the chest and everything else but that one arm as you can see the the hat is covering the arm so it is not really noticeable thx it really helped me a lot 3nodding

Posted: Mon May 24, 2010 5:11 pm

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your right about the chest and everything else but that one arm as you can see the the hat is covering the arm so it is not really noticeable thx it really helped me a lot 3nodding

its not much, glad i could help.you're welcome ^^

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Posted: Wed Jun 02, 2010 2:32 am

I agree with alcor_psythe's suggestions. However, I think the body looks too thick for a side view even in alcor_psythe's redline.

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