Welcome to Gaia! ::

Very nice shading on the cell phone, but watch your symmetry. The left side of the cell phone is nice and symmetric, but the other side isn't. Same can be said with the top and bottom portions of the phone, even in perspective this isn't right.

For the comic on the bottom, It's pretty hard to read the white shirted-guy's actions, especially in the first panel. Is he being cocky? Genuinely curious? I can't tell, his pose and facial expression is just too ambiguous. Be especially careful with the pointing-upward head angle. The brown-haired guy has very readable poses though, I can tell when he's being genuinely interested or mildly ticked off.

Cool first picture. I tried working with the Colors! application on the DS, and it was tough. Kudos to you. XD

Here's a quick redline. Sorry for the sloppiness.


In machines and other non-organic forms, it's jarring to the viewer when something is off symmetry. Even curved lines on machines are treated with symmetry. This is one reason why I hate drawing technology.

On an interesting side note, it's jarring to the viewer when an organic form has straight lines (example: a human body. It will always have curves, even if it's ever-so-slight).

For sake of simplicity and exaggerated style, it's not a bad thing to use straight lines on a character (and in the case of anime, easier to animate), but there will always be curved lines on a normal human being, especially if you're drawing him/her realistically. It does create a nice rhythm when you try to avoid straights, though.

I understand the silver part is supposed to have a curve, but your drawing's silver part isn't symmetric to the other side. Notice how, in your greenlined drawing, the left side's silver part starts curving towards the bottom, while the right side's silver part starts curving more toward the middle of the phone.

Even though a lot of modern technology is starting to smooth out more, it doesn't feel organic. It relies on symmetry and whatever looks aesthetically pleasing while still being easy to reproduce. Vectors, in a way. That's why it's easier to draw modern-day technology, like a cell phone, with rulers or Photoshop, despite having curves.