Make your posts detailed. That's all I have to say.
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NOT TO DO
She played her flute very well. She read the music like reading a book. When the song ended, and the composer cut of, she lowered the flute. She smiled, and closed her eyes. She was remembering the recent memory of the song that she loved. Everyone in the crowd clapped, liking the song that she also likes. The composer bowed and so did the students, then they left the stage.
WHAT TO DO
She played her flute like and angel singing. Over the years of her learning, she learned to read music like she read a book. Very easily. The girl loved this song, it was most likely her favorite of everything she knew how to play. She changed her fingers to play the last note. Big finish, big finish... She always needed to end on a good note. That's how she had been taught. That's how she always wants it. The girl opened her mouth to let in the cool air filled with a mixture of metal and wood smells. She quickly took a breath and played the last half-note. The composer cut of and lowered his hands, signaling for them to put the instruments down. The girl grinned at the recent memory of the song she loved. The song she grew up hearing. Her eyes closed as the crowed applauded. She played through the song in her head, her mouth like her flute was at it. She blew every note, then opened her eyes to see the crowd smiling and softening their applause. The composer turned and bowed. The band stood up and bowed along with him. And then, it was over. Just like that.
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