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 Posted: Tue Feb 09, 2010 1:42 pm
So I know that we need more posts and stuff so Im putting up a song I wrote for my best friend. It would be nice to get feedback but of course, it doesnt seem like there are many people here to GIVE feedback, but Im trying my best to keep this guild alive. People are missing out. Im also cutting out the name at the beginning of the poem for privacy reasons. Im aware that some of it rhymes and some doesnt.
__________, your soul is so pure
I couldnt sing every good word about you
the world would have no more hard years to edure
because this praise is infinate
for theres nothing negative
about you
If I label you my best friend
I would be unworthy
If I took you as my sister
Your relation to me would be unjustified
You read my heart like a book
and you guess my thoughts with a look
You are the petals on the most gentle rose
I am nothing without you
You are the moonlight on a dark night
I cant see without you
You are the angel soaring above me
I cant live without you
represent my wings to take flight
on the rainy day
on the cloudless night
Her beauty would outshine the sun
If the planets had eyes they would surely envy
A soul so sweet
That honey would feel intimidated
and if the rivers had run dry
becuase you had made them cry
their waters would pour to the sea
and the world would over flow with tears of joy
You are the petals on the most gentle rose
I am nothing without you
You are the moonlight on a dark night
I cant see without you
You are the angel soaring above me
I cant live without you
represent my wings to take flight
on the rainy day
on the cloudless night
You are the melody of my song
my voice would not reflect the delight
you bring to me in every waking moment
the smiles you shed light upon my shadow
and the laughs you give to overcome my flaws
You are the petals on the most gentle rose
I am nothing without you
You are the moonlight on a dark night
I cant see without you
You are the angel soaring above me
I cant live without you
represent my wings to take flight
on the rainy day
on the cloudless night............
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Posted: Fri Jun 25, 2010 1:41 pm
Wow...this is really good. I like how you really put your true feelings (I'm pretty sure anyway-I don't know you-or your friend). The song is really meaningful. I liked it a lot. In short terms-it's really really good. Keep up the good work!-writing-keeping this guild going!
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Posted: Mon Jun 28, 2010 3:48 am
Sounds good, but through this, I see that you depend on your friend for everything. Try throwing a storyline into the song...?
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