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 Posted: Thu Feb 04, 2010 11:02 pm
I'm really sorry for all the hurt I gave to you
I didn't mean for it to happen that way
I really thought our love would help me through
but it just wasn't enough to make me stay.
I really and truly loved you - down to my very core
but too much of a good thing is never good
in the end - thats what made me walk out the door.
It was too much for me to take - so much more than I thought I could.
I wrote this poem with the hopes for you,
to understand exactly what happened that day
to tell you the reason i left - the only one thats true
but maybe thats a poem for another page.
[[On the last sentence i thought of a substitute sentence->
"but maybe thats a story best saved - for another tearfilled day"
tell me which you think is better and anything else you think about it.]]
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Posted: Fri Feb 19, 2010 3:43 pm
Nice poem, but the dashes should be commas, and maybe the last line could be something like, I thought it was the best way, don't use day twice
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