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girly88

PostPosted: Tue Aug 10, 2004 2:09 pm


What is it to feel alone?
To be lost in your own mind just because of the empty wind.
No friends by my side.
Alone in the darkness I will subside.
Holding my own, thats the way I was born.
I just wanted to be alone for one second.
But now your all gone.
I know how you feel.
Unwanted, alone.
but sense you feel this way I feel this way also.
but the title a poem is just a phrase.
Just "a" poem alone in the maze.
you see the paper is lonely until it finds ink.
My mind is lonly until I think.
So what dse that make us.
we are just one in a crowd never noticed and never loud.
But you know it's are fault we are so lonely...
never available to someone who may be coming..
PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, 2004 8:38 pm


I like your line about ink and paper, though I can't place a poetic device with it at the moment. Personifacation maybe? Anyways, be sure to watch your spelling.

Shadow Minstrel


Res0

PostPosted: Tue Aug 17, 2004 12:04 pm


girly88
What is it to feel alone?
To be lost in your own mind just because of the empty wind.
No friends by my side.
Alone in the darkness I will subside.
Holding my own, thats the way I was born.
I just wanted to be alone for one second.
But now your all gone.
I know how you feel.
Unwanted, alone.
but sense you feel this way I feel this way also.
but the title a poem is just a phrase.
Just "a" poem alone in the maze.
you see the paper is lonely until it finds ink.
My mind is lonly until I think.
So what dse that make us.
we are just one in a crowd never noticed and never loud.
But you know it's are fault we are so lonely...
never available to someone who may be coming..

Very nice! I think you did a very good job on it!
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