I do actually! I marked out a few pointers and such whilst I judged.
Pms
- "The back of her throat felt clogged, like somebody had pumped
it full of soot, ash, earthy leaves" - should have an 'and' to make it flow better.
- Sentence starting with a But, my English Language course forbids anyone to use the word. Its kind of becoming archaic. I got myself out of the habit, though myself I used to see it as common as writer's still do it...but it is grammatically incorrect xD
Other than that, it is perfect. The rest of the points deducted was words not used and one for going over. I honestly really enjoyed it!
11Linda
Punctuation/grammar =
= I sit here cogitated
=Where is he now, the man who saved me for the hardship
=Never meant to hurt her, he left her
=Never meant to hurt her, he left her
= Sentences need to be shorter for drama and emphasis
Spelling (out of 10) 6
=You didn’t kill you wife
=why you I want my only daughter to not be happy
=Arinicia, you stopped killing when you meet me did not you
=talking with an x member
Other -
= Mixture of tenses
I like the idea, and with improvEments, I'm sure you will go far!
Pms
- "The back of her throat felt clogged, like somebody had pumped
it full of soot, ash, earthy leaves" - should have an 'and' to make it flow better.
- Sentence starting with a But, my English Language course forbids anyone to use the word. Its kind of becoming archaic. I got myself out of the habit, though myself I used to see it as common as writer's still do it...but it is grammatically incorrect xD
Other than that, it is perfect. The rest of the points deducted was words not used and one for going over. I honestly really enjoyed it!
11Linda
Punctuation/grammar =
= I sit here cogitated
=Where is he now, the man who saved me for the hardship
=Never meant to hurt her, he left her
=Never meant to hurt her, he left her
= Sentences need to be shorter for drama and emphasis
Spelling (out of 10) 6
=You didn’t kill you wife
=why you I want my only daughter to not be happy
=Arinicia, you stopped killing when you meet me did not you
=talking with an x member
Other -
= Mixture of tenses
I like the idea, and with improvEments, I'm sure you will go far!
