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the_forgotten_thought Captain
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 1:54 am
yeah, i feel lame since no one seems to have gone in here much, but i'm gonna put up a poem i just wrote. i feel like s**t but... well, it's self explainatory, actually, so i'll just shut up.
Fallen footsteps guide the path, like breadcrumbs impervious to birds For the vultures have all tired of the crust, and hang on to your dying words. Crosses line the forest walls dedicated to the pieces of heart That were lost in the battles of the war in my mind that tore my life apart. The path grows dimmer as the trees thicken, leafless, though they may be Their dark dew seeps into my pores and combine with gravity Weighing down, the pressure mounts, but I must not lose my stride I’ll run to the ends of forever and back, but I can never hide From the shadow that has followed me—I can feel it closing in Walking almost side-by-side until I feel its chill within With each inhalation, it rasps my voice, until a scream cannot be heard Swallowing me into his black abyss, I fall with no protesting word Alone I start my path once more, my hamster wheel one mile closer to the sun. It’s almost insulting to have to start once more in a war that can’t be won.
still a bit rough, i'll fix it up later, but tell me what you think, mkay?
[edit] i deleted the original poem and changed a few words, so here's what i've changed it up to.
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Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2010 4:12 pm
one word: WOW lol you have no idea how jealous i am of you at this moment. I constantly suffer from writers block crying . amazing lol good job.
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the_forgotten_thought Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 12:25 pm
haha, thanks. it's nice to know people are actually comin in this subbie.
anyways, even if you think you have writer's block or if you feel your poem isn't good, post it anyways. i love reading other people's stuff. not to mention checkin out awesome artwork. that's, like, my one weakness. my drawings are mediocre at best. haha. but yeah, post post post!
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