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You ruined my life with three little words. (PG-13)

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sweetpea90b
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 27, 2009 9:30 am


You --- ruined my life with three little words…
I love you
<3


Loud voices echoed down the stairs. The hate, the, loathing, the pain seeped into to every word spoken. “I can’t believe…” Mary’s voice was cut off by a sharp slap, which rounded in the silence. I could feel the sting, pulse through me and if it were me that was struck. “Please! ... Please” her trembling words came through vacillating convolutions. “Please! Don’t hurt me anymore??” Her voice was now soft there was a brief pause in the violent uproar before again the sounds of body’s crashing commenced. Cry’s of pain rung out clear, in both male and female breath. “Please… stop! I don’t deserve this...” her voice sounded bare… hallow. Next thing I knew doors were slamming and someone was driving off. Dad or Mary? I didn’t know. I hated the helpless feeling I get when there’s something I didn’t know. I felt like I might throw-up and burst into tears right there in bed. Then it came into my mind, the scars that lined my arm and legs burned, with desire, at the thought of my ‘best friend’ My release from this place.

 
PostPosted: Tue Dec 01, 2009 3:53 pm


sweetpea90b
You --- ruined my life with three little words…
I love you
<3


Loud voices echoed down the stairs. The hate, the, loathing, the pain seeped into to every word spoken. “I can’t believe…” Mary’s voice was cut off by a sharp slap, which rounded in the silence. I could feel the sting, pulse through me and if it were me that was struck. “Please! ... Please” her trembling words came through vacillating convolutions. “Please! Don’t hurt me anymore??” Her voice was now soft there was a brief pause in the violent uproar before again the sounds of body’s crashing commenced. Cry’s of pain rung out clear, in both male and female breath. “Please… stop! I don’t deserve this...” her voice sounded bare…hallow. Next thing I knew doors were slamming and someone was driving off. Dad or Mary? I didn’t know. I hated the helpless feeling I get when there’s something I didn’t know. I felt like I might throw-up and burst into tears right there in bed. Then it came into my mind, the scars that lined my arm and legs burned, with desire, at the thought of my ‘best friend’ My release from this place.



Er, I think you mean 'hollow'. Did you?

Anyway, this piece leaves me curious. I want to know what it's talking about, it's making me want more information about what's going on. I'm pretty sure it's an excerpt from a larger story, or the very beginning of a longer piece.

What I'm trying to say is, good job. I want more. XD

marleyann


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PostPosted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 2:25 pm


i have a awsomr profile thats all i have to say
PostPosted: Fri Jan 01, 2010 5:10 pm


the emo song123
i have a awsomr profile thats all i have to say

<_<;
Because that's completely relevant to this thread.

marleyann

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