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 Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 8:00 am
 Rules:
~ No posting in a test thread unless it's your test.
~ Limited to 4 posts. You can use less.
~ You have 2 weeks to finish your rp.
~ Must use the battle field type assigned to you.
~ You create a monster of your choice, unless a different rule is specified for that test.
~ Have fun!
1~Ice- Pretty simple with this one. The floor becomes solid ice. There are random chunks of ice protruding from the floor. And of course, you have little to no traction.
2~Desert- Pretty much nothing but massive sand dunes. You sink down into the sand, which slows you down a LOT. If the wind blows, the sand gets kicked up, which obscures vision.
3~Open Field- A plain grassy field with nothing on it.
4~Ocean- A mini ocean about 40 feet deep. There are five floating platforms for battlers to stand on. The plat forms bob around and it's really hard to keep your balance on them.
5~Dense Forest- The arena is packed from wall to wall with dense, tropical trees. As in any tropical jungle, there are lots of vines and other such things to get tangled up in.
6~Land of Fire- Parts of the arena floor sink away, leaving behind pits of lava. Also, pillars of fire erupt from the floor periodically.
7~Concrete- A plain concrete floor.
8~The Abyss- Near complete darkness engulfs the arena. Dark energy is abundant in this field.
9~The Sanctuary- Opposite of the Abyss. Light energy fills the arena. Its very bright!
10~No floor- The floor drops away leaving a pit filled with spikes. There are levitating platforms at varying heights, going all the way to the top of the arena. It's hard to jump from platform to platform, and trust me, you don't want to fall.
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ginseku generated a random number between
1 and 10 ...
9!
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Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 8:38 am
Gin apologizes for the extra posts in your test Togi
the Random number generator gave you the Land of fire again at first, so i deleted it, then you got the Desert, which there are already TWO of in the other tests. I'm trying to find something more suitable for you.
9~ The sanctuary: Opposite of the Abyss. Light energy fills the arena. Its very bright!
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Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 3:45 am
Another test and another room. This seemed to be a major part of the school. To fight and battle creatures of the unknown. Togiretogire accepted the challenges of course. To learn how to defeat the various creatures this school set upon him would be good for the future. The calm silence of the room came over Togiretogire and put the dragon on his edge. He tried to listen but could hear nothing. A drop of sweat came down his forehead and into his left eye. The sting of the salt burned for a second. He hated and feared his own body for it's weakness and because Togiretogire's inexperience in controlling it. His eyes had trouble to adjust tot he bright light and it put Togiretogire even on more edge. His fingers of his left hand nervously tapped the handle of his sword. Something seemed to feel good and that was wrong. Good was a feeling Togiretogire knew only when he had perfect control of his surroundings. The room felt good as he walked around even if he was feeling disturbed by everything. The room seemed to be endless as Togiretogire walked around in it.
The bright light of the room prevented Togiretogire to see any edge and to his great far he had lost sight of the wall behind him. Something seemed to have drawn him into the room. Away from safety and this wasn't like Togiretogire. He had never plunged into the unknown just like that. The nervous sweat came dropping down his cheeks as Togiretogire spun around when he tried to remember where the entrance would be. No matter here he looked there was only the bright light. He was an cave animal and would have enjoyed the darkness so much more. This was a room that taunted Togiretogire. The dragons eye adjusted slowly tot he light. Of course it was bright when he was flying around but this was like he looked straight to the sun at all the time. What sort of beast could live here? The thought had taken a hit on Togiretogire. Because the room had him forgotten about a big reason for him being here. There was a monster in the room along with Togiretogire.
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Posted: Tue Aug 25, 2009 2:23 am
Togiretogire's eyes was getting adjusted to the scenery. It was an open room, yet there was shadows. The room wasn't just empty. There was something far, far away. Togiretogire needed to get there. He needed to kill this feeling of unrest. It was ruining him form the inside. There he was stumbling as he tried to increase his speed. He tumbled and rolled over. He wasn't trained for this body. He hated to walk on two legs. He couldn't keep up with the two leg things. He ran faster on four, he had a tail for balance when on his back legs. Here he was standing on two legs with the balance of a plank. He never knew how humans truly could just run no matter what. The second his mind had trouble Togiretogire lost all of his balance. Well maybe not all but it was hard to walk straight. Here he was stressed out by the light, the feeling of unrest even when he was alone. Well he needed to get to the shadows. As he did approach the first one he came to a table. An empty table that was in his way. In the very edge he heard a voice, a voice so beautiful. It had to be of a goddess of some kind. It just had to be something like that. He for some reason wanted to get to the voice. Even something felt bad, yet Togiretogire ignored that because he had felt this since he entered the room.
The table was in the way and Togiretogire decided to walk around it but no mater how he walked it was still there. Yet he could see the borders of the table. It was like it moved with him. He tried to push on it. It didn't budge. This was annoying indeed. This had to be some magical thing. Then it came to Togiretogire that it was just a thing and it wasn't his. Without a second thought he grabbed his sword and sliced the table in half. It didn't fall down. Togiretogire slammed his hand in the table, with all his might. Cracks became visible all over the table but it still stood. Violence would not be the answer. Then what could he do? What had the voice said? Something about truth, about letting her know. It was just a table right? Togiretogire tensed his legs and jumped up in the air. The table followed him but not as fast. Togiretogire grew two wings and the second that he flew over the table it fell in those pieces Togiretogire had created earlier. The spell had been broken. More shadows was up ahead and now Togiretogire knew that the monster had to be guarding the girl. Togiretogire patience had been tested and he had passed it. Well a bit at least. Then before his face, an axe appeared and not in the good way.
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Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 3:52 am
Togiretogire is tossed backwards from the impact, yet nothing seems to be wrong with him. The area of the impact had been neutralized by something. All there was traces of was something moving into the skin. Something black grew into the skin. A grin was seen on Togiretogire's face. "The strength of a human!" Togiretogire drew his sword and jumped forward to slash the knight ahead of him. Only to find the armor empty, that shocked Togiretogire. It was just a trap, made to slay humans it would seem. This insight calmed Togiretogire. He entered a hallway of these falling axe traps. It was easy to parry and evade them. Togiretogire guessed that he was the first to come this far around here. For after a while he stepped into a grand hall. There sat a woman, a young woman with a grand body. That Togiretogire could see, for the woman had very tempting clothings. There where trolls and orchs ahead of the girl though. Togiretogire had entered what seemed to be a feast. He guessed that this would be the very monster. Togiretogire drew his sword and ran into the room. He had felt a trap and here it was orchs protecting a woman. A woman he possibly had to save. It made Togiretogire feel more secure but something still felt wrong.
Togiretogire first attack seperated a head from it's shoulders. Quick adn effective the dragon's dans where as he slayed beast after beast. A punch, a slash, a kick and a thrust. His strength was more then these weak beasts. No one had a chance when it came to the brutal styles. Orchs and troll relied on strength in combat and Togiretogire was both cunning and strong. He came closer to the woman and the desperation of the beasts was seen. Togiretogire felt stronger for each kill he did. He felt better about himself. He ignored the feeling of unrest. He could stand tall on his own and stand his ground now. Nothing would stop him now. Never would he fall at this point. Yet he felt the blood come down fromt he various cuts he had recieved. Togiretogire had forgotten his wekness in the human body. He was a bit shocked about this. He lost concentration. He begun to just go rampage on everything. He felt cornered and blew out a massive bolt of fire to clear out the area ahead of him. The trolls and orchs kept comng at him. Togiretogire had not known them to be this many. They might win, this though echoed in Togiretogire's mind. His legs would have shakened if he had not been in the heat of battle. He then blew a final fire ball from his mouth. Then they where gone, Togiretogire had killed them all. Well that was how Togiretogire saw it.
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Posted: Sun Aug 30, 2009 4:33 am
Togiretoigre approached the woman, she was of course still there. Hanging in chains prevented anyone from going anywhere. The woman looked at him but didn't speak. Wasn't that common to do when rescued? Humans could realy mess with Togiretogire's brain from time to time. Maybe he should just cut her down? That feeling of unrest came back to haunt Togiretogire omce more. During the battle he had forgotten all about it. It made no sense but yet this bright room also made no sense. He grabbed a hold of his sword and then he chopped the chains in half. So much for that and suddenlt that woman seemed to come back to life. She thanked him and hugged him. That was to be expected he guessed. Yet then the woman begun to pull Togiretogire in a direction. Maybe she knew the way out. That was quite calming and Togiretogire calmed himself down and follwed the woman. The light became brighter and brighter and within minutes the drgaon could no longer see more then the woman. She stood there turned to him and begun to hug him again. She kissed him and placed her hand into his hair. This wasn't really something for Togiretogire. He had little love for humans and that might have been what saved him here.
The moment he pulled her away the bright light lost it's a bit. He could see the truth and what must have been hsi real unrest. The woman's body had changed and a spider there stood. Something very close to a spider with sharp legs and a human body. This was a true devlish trap to be set upon males and some females no doubt. Had Togiretogire not been a dragon he might be dead now. Well one of the legs came at Togiretogire but it stopped at his chest. The woman looked surprised and a bit pissed. "Don't think that you can kill me that easy!" Togiretogire said. The leg in front of him he cut of and the spider woman moved backwards. Togiretogire followed. He would not allow here to vanish within the bright light. Yet he could do nothing about that. For the light became so bright that Togiretogire had to close his eyes. Yet his nostrils and eardrums was working full time. He heard the movement of 7 feet and felt the scent of her blood. She came up behind him and Togiretogire waited. The woman bent down to bit his neck and all that she did tatse was Togiretogire's steel. The spider woman died quickly and the room lost it's bright power. There was nothing around him, but behind him the door he entered to get into the bright room. He would enter that door twice.
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Posted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 3:04 pm
Nice job, you used all your posts and kept consistent.
I'll drop a 75 here
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Posted: Mon Sep 21, 2009 4:16 pm
Scoring:
A- 85 credits
B- 75 credits
C- 65 credits
D- 45 credits
F- 20 credits
Length and Pacing: was good
General grammar rules: you still need a lot of work, but you've definately improved!!! biggrin Just make sure to watch the few words you spelled wrong and read up some more on sentence structures. Make sure it's always a sentence that has a subject, a verb, and a point.
Personality: Loved it. Even the way the sentences were all choppy, it added to his character. great job
Use of Environment: There's not a lot you can do with pure light but I'm very happy with how you related it to a creature of innocence, or so was thought. It was a great foreshadow
Details: Very good details
I must give you a 70 or B- mostly for grammar sake
Keep up the good work!!!!
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Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 2:14 pm
Grade 1=75
Grade 2=70
Final grade=72.5(<73)
Credits earned=73
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