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B3autiful_trag3dy Vice Captain
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 Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2009 4:28 pm
You grip your hands on me,
I Struggle to get loose.
But secretly I think we both know
I don't want to let go
As I give up, the coldness surrounds my every will.
Numbness fills my heart
As I begin to sink back into your web of lies
And for the moment,
I don't care what happens
You smile realizing you've won
And that there's nothing I can do.
You take all thats ever made me and Destroy it,
My morals, truths, and personality,
Because now, "Your all I'll have"
As The old me fades
Your face remains engraved deep into my memories.
I no longer control who I am,
I'm broken, Beaten and scared,
Mentally,
I know i'll never be the same,
Beucase I have no idea how to go on without you
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Posted: Sat Jul 25, 2009 11:12 pm
It needs to have consistency, some stanzas have more lines then others. And please, you are a poet! Have the decency to use basic grammar in your poems.
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B3autiful_trag3dy Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jul 28, 2009 10:29 am
The_Gadfly It needs to have consistency, some stanzas have more lines then others. And please, you are a poet! Have the decency to use basic grammar in your poems. Well then help me with it. I tried to fix some of my mistakes.
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Posted: Sat Oct 31, 2009 6:57 pm
Made some more edits i think it truly reflects me now.
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B3autiful_trag3dy Vice Captain
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