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Posted: Sun Jul 12, 2009 1:27 pm
Name:Juliette Anada GracelyGender:Female Year:6th House:Ravenclaw
Hair/Eye Color: Brown Hair, Blue EyesPet:Owl named Pasey Ethincity:white
Digging Deeper: Juliette's Mom was a witch, and her father a Muggle She didnt come from Britain like the rest, but her father grew up in Britain, So they moved from America when Juliette was 9. When Juliette was accepted to Hogwarts she couldn't believe it. Her father was resilaint though he read about the one school for all girls in France and thougth that was much better... Even though she was accepted there she went to Hogwarts anyway...
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Posted: Mon Jul 13, 2009 11:20 am
Closer Look: Juliette woke up in Gryffindor Common Room's girl dormotory She got dressed and headed for the great hall to eat. After that she head for potions class. Snape said: We are learning about making polyjuice potions. HE said glumly."You will not work on them or make one outside of class!, any one who does is expelled or detention" Juliette made the polyjuice potion to change someone into a Frog. After class she headed for Transfiguration. Herbology passed ina blur as well as Diviniation. After lunch, Juliette went to Charms and Ancient Runes. After supper she went and studied in the COmmon Room till curfew.
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Psychotic Daizy Dukes Captain
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Posted: Tue Jul 14, 2009 7:41 am
You have Not been Accepted to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.
Absolutely not. The list is very long, but I will try.
- The Title pays no regard to the Rules. It should have gone as: Student Name// Year// House
- The grammar and spelling is absolutely atrocious. There are sentences with no sort of beginning or end, punctuation is scattered here and there.
- You have altered the skeleton, and along with the atrocious grammar, it took me a full five minutes trying to figure this out.
- The profile is far too short, it has hardly any sort of detail. What I am understanding is that Juliette has no personality or appearance, save for brown hair and blue eyes. Is she a floating mass of hair and eyes?
- The roleplay section actually made me want to cry. It was that bad. It has no regard at all for any part of this roleplay. No grammar, spelling, or even a regard for the storyline that the Captains and Crew have worked so hard for.
Reading this, I sincerely wondered if you read the Seventh Book. Snape is dead, his body has probably rotted no nothing but bones and grease by now, Thirty years after the fall of Voldemort. And then there is disregard for the Second Book.
The Polyjuice Potion is only to be used for human transformations. Thus, turning someone into a frog is entirely wrong. Frankly, that would have gotten you a detention or worse from Snape/the Potions Teacher. It's against school rules to use the potion in any form. There is a reason that recipe is in the Restricted Section.
Juliette seems to move through her day as if it was a second. Forgive me, but wasn't she a Ravenclaw? Why in the nine worlds is she sleeping in the Gryffindor Girls' Dorm?
You may repost an altered version of this profile, meeting our standards. Thank you.
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