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 Posted: Thu Jun 18, 2009 9:05 pm
Did this a few weeks ago, supposed to be kinda cliche creepy, like old slasher flicks, you know?
Serial Slasher
I have to push
just to go backwards.
Whenever you could
you put me my proper place.
I feel alive,
as you die,
as you scream for me.
I wanna die
every time
you run away from me!
No one fears me,
but they scream
as they die!
I wouldn't lie
when I said it's your turn!
Oh, Oh, OoOh!
We have to fight,
just to stay alive.
Hold on to the light,
hold me close tonight!
You stay alive,
as I cut,
as your heart bleeds out.
You wanna die,
all in time,
who have you let out?
No one fears me,
but they scream
as they die!
I wouldn't lie
when I said it's your turn!
Oh, Oh, Oh!
You're all afraid
to fight off my blade.
To dampen the knife
hold your breath,
steal your life
Tonight!
No one fears me,
but they scream
as they die!
I wouldn't lie
when I said it's your turn!
Oh, Oh, Oh!
You're all afraid
to fight off my blade.
To dampen the knife
hold your breath,
steal your life
Tonight!
(instrumental here, aka, guitar solo that melts faces)
Please hold your tongue,
bite it off if you must.
They can't hear me
If they do then I'm done.
No one fears me,
but they scream
as they die!
I wouldn't lie
when I said it's your turn!
Oh, Oh, Oh!
You're all afraid
to fight off my blade.
To dampen the knife
hold your breath,
steal your life
Tonight!
No one fears me, ( I want to hear)
but they scream (you scream)
as they die! (Tonight)
I wouldn't lie (I want to hear)
when I said it's your turn! (You scream tonight)
Oh, Oh, Oh! (I want to)
You're all afraid (hear you scream Tonight)
to fight off my blade. (I want to hear)
To dampen the knife (You scream Tonight!)
hold your breath, ( I want to Hear)
steal your life (YOU SCREAM)
Tonight! (TONIGHT!!)
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Posted: Thu Jun 25, 2009 8:17 pm
This is interesting xD When it came to slasher flicks, I never even thought about the killer's perspective!
The last stanza {?} is the best I think, since there's two different lines playing at the same time, I don't know but that'd be interesting to hear. x3
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Posted: Sun Jun 28, 2009 1:11 pm
I like it. It has a rhyme, but it's not so Sonnet-like which is annoying in a song. And the entire perspective of the Killer is nice and original. It's sadistic and dark but still very entertaining. I don't think I can add anything to this and make it better, very nice work! C=
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