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 Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2009 10:03 pm
I wanted a critique on these two pictures, something seems off with them, It's probably the lack of posing or something I'm sure  
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Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2009 4:17 am
I see what you mean about something being off...but I can't quite tell either except that they seem to be slanting to the left and there's something about the arms...
Sorry I'm not much help but I know a good tip to see what's wrong. If you did it by hand on paper just look on the other side and hold it to the light (to see it flipped) and you'll be able to see anything that's wrong with it balance wise. (It works most of the time, I do it with a lot of my pictures and it works)
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Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2009 1:40 pm
Sorry if this post ends up being long. I'm long-winded. Firstly, I like 'em, the colored one especially. I like how it's colored. 3nodding
But now we are to the critiquing! twisted <-- I'm actually not that evil; I just figured it was fitting.
Let's start with the colored one. I don't see anything really wrong with the face or head (though, I think I should state that you generally don't see your eyes through your hair like that. And the eyes have slightly different-sized irises), so let's leave that outta this. It's the body we're focusing on. The shoulders should be a little more square. Like.... hmmmm... don't slant them so much, I guess. I mean, DON'T MAKE THEM TOTALLY STRAIGHT! Heavens, no. Just don't slant quite so much. Look at yourself in the mirror; it takes quite the effort to slant them that far down. Also, you have his arms/hands (the right one, his left, our right, could be just a tad longer since the hands are doing just about the same thing; just match those arms up a big) in a position that says he's turned a bit, but nothing else indicates such a pose. What you have to do is make sure you either bring that right (his left, our right) arm out to match that other one, or you have to turn his body a bit more (making his right, our left, side more visible than his left side), so that everything matches up. And then you'll have to make sure the neck doesn't look to stiff, otherwise it'll look like he's standing naturally with his head creepily turned toward us. rofl
For the un-colored one:
Hmmmm.... The guy on the left could do with some folds in his clothing (pants especially). Even if you were intending to color the folds in, you should still have the creases on the outline of the pants drawn in. And his legs are a bit too straight, lacking dynamic shape (and they're a bit too skinny). It works with the colored guy since his pants are the type that produce that kinda shape, but it doesn't quite worked with this one. And I think you should stop making the hands do different things, unless you're going for a certain pose because you've ended up curving the arms differently. And your balled fists look a bit off in shape, so careful with that. By the way, the arm on the left is a bit too long, even if you had made the legs thicker and a tad longer.
That poor woman has no hips! Give her curves, man! blaugh A woman doesn't really want a total lack of curves. Give her some nice, round hips (not too round, else she'll either look deformed or just very hippy). And her knees are a little too far down (though that may just be because her legs are a bit too skinny). And those arms are not consistent with each other again. Look at the elbows. They're in different places. Wich also may be why both the arms are (or look) too long. Finally, the last thing is that that hand on her chest is not correctly curved so it just looks kinda flat and not really resting on her chest... curve the fingers a bit more and shade. I think you can too it. mrgreen
Well...DONE! I told you it'd be long. gonk My goodness, that's LONG! I didn't even realize. Well, hope that helps. Don't think that this means any of your pictures are bad. Everyone's got flaws. In fact, this isn't even the longest critique I've given someone. sweatdrop I hope people don't hate me or feel bad; that's not my intention. cry
I'm just trying to help with yours. And once you get comfortable with straight ahead standing poses, then try other poses. I think you'd probably be able to get other poses once you've conquered this. Oh! And I think you are excellent at coloring. I still seem to struggle with coloring. Often. Have fun drawing. Can't wait to see more from you. blaugh
P.S. I really really really like the colored guy's right (our left) hand. It looks awesome. Perfect ('sides for the fact he's got no fingernails; shape is perfect though 4laugh ).
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Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2009 7:57 pm
First off,
I really like your characters clothing and design!
I struggle with clothing a lot when I draw characters,
and you've managed to give each a nice distinct 'style' with realistic clothing and an interesting concept.
However, your drawing are extremely stiff.
Each is posed face on, rigidly, with not much expression in the body or face.
Practice fluid poses, different expressions, and anatomy, and 'flesh out' your characters.
Coloring is quite decent too. n_n
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