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Saline Everwood

PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 12:18 pm


I would like to know what people think please.

All around me I see what it was that you wanted.
It sickens me, the stench of the dead.
Their voices whisper to me.
They want justice.
Death whispers a list of ways for me to kill you.
I smile so evilly.
He's right they're all right.
You do deserve to die.
You're the reason why innocent blood has been spilled.
Well not any more.
I will put a stop to you.
As I lean over your sleeping body with the butcher knife to your throat,
Death stands by me giving me an encouraging smile.
The innocent ghost of the ones you killed that Death can't take home until they have their justice stand by watching.
And I shall give them their justice.
Pressing the knife down harder I slit open your throat.
Your eyes fly open.
Shock flickers over your face as your hands try to cover your throat.
But the blood keeps spilling, pooling around the sheets.
I smile as you die.
I've done what I was meant to do.
I have given the innocent souls their justice.
For I am justice of the dead.
PostPosted: Thu Jul 30, 2009 7:13 pm


That's pretty good, I think it's a little spooky but I like it.

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I N V E E S A B L E

PostPosted: Thu Jul 30, 2009 9:07 pm


Saline Everwood
I would like to know what people think please.

All around me I see what it was that you wanted.
It sickens me, the stench of the dead.
Their voices whisper to me.
They want justice.
Death whispers a list of ways for me to kill you.
I smile so evilly.
He's right
they're all right.
You do deserve to die.
You're the reason why innocent blood has been spilled.
Well not any more.
I will put a stop to you.
As I lean over your sleeping body with the butcher knife to your throat, i pressed a butcher knife to your thoat
Death stands by me giving me an encouraging smile.
The innocent ghosts of the ones you have killed that Death can't take home until they have their justice, stand by watching.
I shall be the one to give them their justice.
Pressing the knife down harder i smile as your life's blood flows from the now gaping wound.
Your eyes fly open, gasping for breath.
Shock flickers over your face as your hands try to cover your throat.
But the blood keeps spilling, pooling around the sheets.
I smile as you die.
I've done what I was meant to do.
I have given the innocent souls their justice.
For I am the giver of justice for the dead.


>,<
i changed a few things, i hope thats ok with you...i liked it, i just enhanced some aspects to give it a more eery feeling...i hope i did at least >,<
PostPosted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 6:58 pm


I N V E E S A B L E
Saline Everwood
I would like to know what people think please.

All around me I see what it was that you wanted.
It sickens me, the stench of the dead.
Their voices whisper to me.
They want justice.
Death whispers a list of ways for me to kill you.
I smile so evilly.
He's right
they're all right.
You do deserve to die.
You're the reason why innocent blood has been spilled.
Well not any more.
I will put a stop to you.
As I lean over your sleeping body with the butcher knife to your throat, i pressed a butcher knife to your thoat
Death stands by me giving me an encouraging smile.
The innocent ghosts of the ones you have killed that Death can't take home until they have their justice, stand by watching.
I shall be the one to give them their justice.
Pressing the knife down harder i smile as your life's blood flows from the now gaping wound.
Your eyes fly open, gasping for breath.
Shock flickers over your face as your hands try to cover your throat.
But the blood keeps spilling, pooling around the sheets.
I smile as you die.
I've done what I was meant to do.
I have given the innocent souls their justice.
For I am the giver of justice for the dead.


>,<
i changed a few things, i hope thats ok with you...i liked it, i just enhanced some aspects to give it a more eery feeling...i hope i did at least >,<


yeah it's okay.

Saline Everwood


Kashaku-Tatsu

PostPosted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 4:10 am


I like it smile
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