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Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 9:20 am
Hello and welcome to my Summer NaNo '09 thread! This year's story will be A Sound Like Thunder, and my goal is 50,000 words or fifteen chapters by the middle of August. I don't know exactly when my deadline will be, but it's going to be in the middle of August -- at the point, I'll be leaving the country for eleven months.
But until then, enjoy the story.
Summary Seventeen years ago, Sabriyya Khwarizmi had a different name and a different life. When his people were forced out of his country, he moved to Egypt with his mother, changed his name, and started anew. Now, he lives in America and teaches Arabic and World History at a local high school. When a memory from his past awakens a strong devotion to the country that used to be his home, Rhee must learn how to juggle his secret identity as the Dümenci, his teaching job, and his personal life. But does he really want to risk everything he knows for a life he left as a child?
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Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 10:11 am
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Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 10:18 am
Characters The following are the major characters in the story.
►Sabriyya "Rhee" Khwarizmi (صبريّة الخوارزمي): A teacher of Arabic and World History at Fort Lantol High School in Vermont. He was born in Khazrstan (see Settings), but moved to Egypt and changed his name when he was eight, then moved to America when he was 18. He travels back to Khazrstan often to protect his people.
Gazıra: Rhee's birth name; changed when he was eight in order to disguise his heritage. Pronounced Gah-zah-rah. Dümenci: This is the name given to Rhee's "hero" persona. Rhee wears his mother's old hijab to hide his identity and goes back to Khazrstan to save his people. Means "helmsman" in Turkish. Pronounced Dew-men-jee. ►Fritz Sivinç: A "ghost" who appears to Rhee. He is connected to Rhee's past in Khazrstan. Surname pronounced See-veench.
►Bryce Cavanah: Rhee's boyfriend.
►The Gods: Not actual characters, but vital to Rhee's decision to become the Dümenci. There are three in the religion of Khazrstan.
Haya: The main god, he is in charge of keeping order of the world. Pronounced Hah-yah. Fırsa: The god of all things certain; considered the "good" god. Answers to Haya, but is not subordinate to him. In a story, Fırsa descends on a town faced with annihilation with a scarf around his face, which disguises him. Rhee's inspiration. Pronounced Fer-sah. Kötü: The god of chance; considered the "bad" god. Also answers to Haya, but is not subordinate. Pronounced Kur-tue. ►Max Caldwell: One of Rhee's students. Figures out the Rhee is from Khazrstan and also convinces Rhee to keep Project O (see Settings) going.
Settings These are the main settings in the story.
►Fort Lantol, Vermont: The town where Rhee lives.
The Box: The club where Rhee and Bryce meet. Fort Lantol High School: The school where Rhee teaches. Rhee's apartment: Where Rhee lives. Renzo Rocco's Coffe House: A coffee house; Bryce rents the flat above it. Project O: A club for high school students. ►Khazrstan: A former country located in the Middle East. It has since been disbanded and taken over, and is now simply a region on the map.
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Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 10:23 am
Soundtrack The following songs inspired this story.
►"You're Gonna Go Far, Kid" by The Offspring [ X ] ►"Always Know Where You Are" by BBMak [ X ] ►"Audience of One" by Rise Against [ X ] ►"Breathe" by Greenwheel [ X ] ►"Breathing" by Lifehouse [ X ]
[always under construction]
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Posted: Sun May 31, 2009 7:13 pm
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Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2009 3:40 pm
Prologue
“We are alone now.” The solitary voice was the only sound in the rubble of a once-glorious town square. Around a central pedestal that had once supported the statue of a great leader, a crowd was gathered in silence, eyes turned to the lone man who spoke with a strong voice despite the uncertainty of the situation. “Somehow, we were covered up and forgotten by the sands that sweep through our town, and now, there’s no one left to save us.”
In the crowd, a young Gazıra stared at the man with wonder in his eyes – to him, this man was a god. He had become a beacon in the darkness when the boy’s father had been killed, a male figure he could look up to.
“Now, we must save ourselves,” the man went on. He turned to speak to the entire crowd. “We must take the steps required to keep ourselves and our families alive. And unfortunately, that means leaving this place forever.”
Gazıra shook his hand free of his mother’s and rushed off through the crowd, pushing through legs of men and women who were too captured in the man’s words to notice.
“Khazrstan is no more.” The man paused to let his words sink in. “Our country fell when our leader fell, and now we are all that is left. There are four hundred and seventy-two people gathered here today: men, women, and children. We are all Khazr, and we are all joined by this disaster.”
The child reached the front of the crowd and stared nearly straight up at the man. There was wonder and awe on his face, as if he could picture the man suddenly sprouting wings and flying to the gods.
“We must cut all ties to our homeland,” the man said, prompting unrest in the crowd. He waited for the whispers to quiet before going on: “In order to live, we must forget about this place. We must change our names. We must never speak our language again. We must forget this place ever existed, but we must always hold Khazrstan in our hearts. This place will always be our home, our birthplace – but it is not the sanctuary it once was. That version of this country will only live on in our hearts and our minds, and there’s nothing we can do to change that.”
A distant pop echoed around the square. At first, Gazıra thought it might have been a bomb like the one that had killed his father. But it had been too quick, more like a gunshot. Gazıra’s mother always told him he was too young to be able to tell a gunshot from a bomb blast, but he couldn’t escape the world he lived in.
He pulled himself out of his daze to focus on his hero again, but his hero was falling to the ground. The body hit with a sickening smack, but Gazıra could still see his hero’s chest rising and falling, blood spurting from a wound in his abdomen and confirming that the sound had been a gunshot.
Gazıra stepped forward slowly as the rest of the crowd looked around worriedly for the shooter. Kneeling, Gazıra brushed dark hair from his hero’s eyes and took his hand. “Don’t cry,” he said as a tear streaked the dirt on his hero’s cheek. “It’s okay. See?” He smiled broadly as if doing so could make the world right again.
His hero returned the smile weakly, but his teeth were red with blood that leaked from the corner of his mouth. He took a few more shuddering breaths, his hand tight around Gazıra’s. Then, he was still.
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Psychotic Maniacal Sanity Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 01, 2009 5:29 pm
I really like this line: " The solitary voice was the only sound in the rubble of a once-glorious town square." I think it sets the scene really nicely. :]
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Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 4:55 pm
The prologue's intriguing. And what with the gods and politics, I can tell that I'm going to enjoy reading more.
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Posted: Tue Jun 09, 2009 4:08 am
I love it so far! Can't wait to read more!
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