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Poems------------------------- {Anything thats poetic goes in here}

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-Broken Demon of Death-

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Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 8:00 am

Welcome to my world
Where darkness creeps
Where life is drained from the
Weakest of the beings.
Where everything is
Worthless
Where time is
Wasted
Where your existence is not
Worthy of anything more than a
Wink to my dreary
World.

Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 3:47 pm

OOO! I like. Nice job on this. 3nodding

Willow Wolfblade
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ms_elfen

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Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 11:54 pm

constant use of the W's emphasises a point (alliteration?)

Very sad, reminds me of a sonnet 3nodding good work

Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 4:20 pm

ms_elfen

constant use of the W's emphasises a point (alliteration?)

Very sad, reminds me of a sonnet 3nodding good work

Mhmm! Alliteration is correct. Thank you. ^.^

-Broken Demon of Death-

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In the know-where-

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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 3:03 pm

Very good, But I think you should make it longer. Maybe go into what it looks like and how it would make the reader feel to be there?

Posted: Sun May 24, 2009 8:53 am

In the know-where-

Very good, But I think you should make it longer. Maybe go into what it looks like and how it would make the reader feel to be there?

Well, the point is that 'My World' is my mind. How I view the world. It doesn't look like anything.

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Poems------------------------- {Anything thats poetic goes in here}

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