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 Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 1:49 am
Been a while, but i just sat down and wrote this. I really don't care if it makes sense to you, that wasn't the point. But i still hope you can enjoy it, all the same. ;D
Perhaps?
Perhaps you cannot fathom,
What i see in the whitest of snow,
or the pale Moons, luminous glow?
Perhaps all that i have shown,
is not what you thought,
and you understand naught?
Maybe my voice is heard,
And you still feel the same,
but can you feel my shame?
Maybe these wounds have healed,
and I am ready once again!
this time, i shant be slain!
Possible, That you really care,
that you want this to bare fruit,
unsure to the taste; does it suit?
Plausible, How you really feel for me,
Molding your words like clay,
are these feelings your trying to convey?
Doubt fills my mind,
Cant you see this is torture?
it's not a playground for your pleasure!
Despair wrings my soul,
with desperate raving,
Does it matter who's caving?
Perhaps,
Perhaps,
Maybe,
Just maybe,
it is possible,
That this is plausible,
and doubt is just a formality,
and my despair is for that which i may never have?
Perhaps,
perhaps...
maybe...
Just maybe.
Hopefully.
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 11:12 pm
I think the fact that maybe it doesn't completely 'make sense' adds to the poem. It enhances the underlying uncertainty that's thematic throughout.
And I understood it, maybe not in its minute detail but I could definitely understand the main point.
And if it wasn't 1:11AM I might be able to grasp the minute details too. XD
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Posted: Tue Aug 11, 2009 4:56 pm
I really like this poem. It was kind of weird reading this though, just because some of the words are things I have been feeling lately. Impeccable timing for me to read this. I like how each stanza has the same rhythm, it makes it really easy to read.
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