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 Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 9:55 am
After seeing a show about steampunk I had an appifiny for a story that I have been thinking up. I had many areas of the world setting thought out but was stumped when ever I turned to how the human groups where. So now I'm working on understanding steampunk so to properly implement it into the world.
This is not going to be traditional Steampunk, but the modded Victorian style is going to be used, but I what to know what you guys think, as well as tips to make things work better.
Here's a gist of what the world setting are.
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it's around 1000 years snits humans have crash laden on the plaint (To be named, but I like Mara) and the technology of space has nearly vanished, and what is left has been remade into a steam based tech. --No oil, and other "modern restores" forced an advanced civilization to change there technology.--
The humans are lead by the Lions Republic, a royalty based democracy that is known to be decadent. the Republics vast military safeguards the main city's and borders, using airships to maintain superiority and control.
The underground, groups opposed or separate from the Lions republic consist of freelancers, and pirates. (Lawbreakers, and Lawavoiders) but to to bands and restrictions of the sell of some technology's, including guns, airships, and computers, many have to build there own legally or illegally.
There then the humans, there are two other races out in the world with there own land. The Drow, constantly at war with the humans, even before the time that both races crashed onto the plaint (shot each other down) The Morrock, a race that had existed on the plaint before the two there races, there a economic powerhouse, with a strong military, currently there economical political power is what keeps the humans and Drow from falling into war.
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That should explain what I'm heading at, it will be steampunk, but there will also be elements of magic, and cyberpunk as well. But for the humans it will be mainly Steampunk.
So what do you guys think, could it work?
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 3:33 pm
I think I should explain about the places and people to help anyone understand the world.
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Land: Ambrose'Addison (western land, grassland, cold/snowy)
Government: Lions Republic. (Aristocracy/Democracy) (Patriarchal)
Race inhabitants- Homosapians (humans) / chimerasapians ("Deneb" furry ear/tailed humans)
Humans: (you know what a human is)
Deneb: During the Humans space age the Deneb were created through genetics to be front line troops, the animal like ears and tail were there to easily identify them from normal humans. after the crass their role changed and over generations they have become common among the human population.
race ability: Eather - an internal electrical field crated by nano machines that allows a person to intract with certant computer/machins (inherited by the mother wile still in the womb)
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Land: Alfsigr (Eastern land, hills, temperate)
Government: Val'Belinda Empire. (Monarchy) (matriarchal)
Race inhabitants Drow (Drowtales) (Drowolath - ash skin Drow, Drowussu - gray skin Drow)
race ability Mana - a natural born energy that can be manipulated by there will. Drowtales
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Land: Ovehito (southern land, Jungles, tropical)
Government: UH, United Houses (Meritocracy)
Race inhabitants Morrock. (Art)
race ability Drive - Similar to Mana, but stays internal acting like a natural stimulant.
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Land: Izotz'Morana (north land Frozen tundra, glaciers)
Government: Anarchy
inhabitants N/A (anyone who dos not want to be found, or can't go home)
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Land: Idwal Mountains (Vast mountain range)(Separates Ambrose'Addison and Alfsigr)
Government: Anarchy (often a airship warzone)
inhabitants N/A (Common pirate haven)
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 3:35 pm
I also want to try a few short story to teats the steampunk style to help me get into the swing. and making characters is the best way for me to start that.
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-Characters-
Group: Freelance Investigators.
Story: Hangover... (a test story...)
Name: Warwick Dacre
Age: 24
Gender M
Race: Human
Bio: A freelance investigator that is known for his ability to tavern to hard to reach places, and avoiding the Lions Republic's eyes.
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Name: Babirye Trahaearn
Age: 21
Gender F
Race: Deneb
Bio: Older twin of Nakato, shes an expert sniper, and often takes care of Warwicks paperwork.
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Name: Nakato Trahaearn
Age: 21
Gender F
Race: Deneb
Bio: younger twin of Babirye, she is an expert at small arms, and helps with on sight investigations.
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---seen one start---
The music was playing with a rough whimsical tune, accented nicely by a violin and vocals. But all that didn’t matter to Warwick for every clank of glass in the bar felt a bit like a sledgehammer to the brain. He normally did not drink on the job, much, but on this occasion it was something he could just avoid, for when your aboard an airship casino your either spending your money on games or on ale, and if your not doing eater then the guards tend to take a likening to you.
“ahh, my bloody head”
Warwick looked at his watch, 11:44, about time he got moving, the casino was about to make dock and he didn’t have any plans on staying aboard for very long. Stumbling around, he picked up his hat, it was an old worn out tryconed hat, they had gone out of fashion over a hundred years ago but he still liked them. It was the same for his cote, that was so worn out that the seams at the bottom ware gone. Overall Warwick had a bit of a shabby apparents, despite the more gentlemanly cloths he has under his cote.
As he moved to the exit Warwick held his head as with every step the pounding only got worse. Passing one table he spied a bottle of, well he didn’t know what it was but it was hard licker that probably cost a hell of a lot, and something that strong probably would help with a hangover. Quickly picking it up and taking a swig of it as he turned around, but still heading to the exit but now backwards, he then placed the licker down on another table. Nobody saw him do it, so he was in the clear, now he just needed to get to the exit.. Warwick had bumped into something big.
“What do you think your doing?” It had a very deep voice, turning around Warwick saw a man that was about a foot taller then him, no shirt, and more mussels then the guy probably needed.
“Oh just walking backwards, nothing wrong with that now is here”
“Not when you start knocking things over, do I need to throw you out of here”
“No, no, no actually I was just leaving, as you can see I was heading to the door.”
The man snorted, and sat down at a nearby table, he was just another patron, the security here at least have shirt on. So Warwick headed to the door agene, this time walking forward so not to anger any other mussel men. The door was illuminated with neon lamps above it like the rest of the bar, it wasn’t all that bright, but right now Warwick didn’t care.
Taking a step out of the bar Warwick could here some yelling from back inside the bar. It was something about stolen rum, and another voice yelling back about the other being a cheat or something. It didn’t matter as Warwick got moving as soon as he heard the sound of chairs braking, and glass hitting walls. It was best if he didn’t get involved in all that, as the security on the ship tend to overreact to this sort of thing.
----seen one end----
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 8:41 pm
I hope you typed that first bit hastily because there are some really odd typos in there. sweatdrop
But the whole "steampunk on a different planet" thing sounds rather interesting. You say "no oil" but I doubt that's a good idea, since oil is a prime lubricant for all the moving bits in a steam engine, and it's unlikely that steam power would even be developed without at least SOME presence of oil. Sure, they could develop wax and mineral based lubes separate from oil, but you'd have to specify. And if they're advanced enough (possibly with some residual space tech), maybe some sort of crazy silicone based lube, though I don't know how plausible silicone based lubricant is for hot and heavy machinery (since heavy machinery tends to benefit from the greasiness of good ole oil-based lubricant).
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 9:00 pm
Xeigrich I hope you typed that first bit hastily because there are some really odd typos in there. sweatdrop But the whole "steampunk on a different planet" thing sounds rather interesting. You say "no oil" but I doubt that's a good idea, since oil is a prime lubricant for all the moving bits in a steam engine, and it's unlikely that steam power would even be developed without at least SOME presence of oil. Sure, they could develop wax and mineral based lubes separate from oil, but you'd have to specify. And if they're advanced enough (possibly with some residual space tech), maybe some sort of crazy silicone based lube, though I don't know how plausible silicone based lubricant is for hot and heavy machinery (since heavy machinery tends to benefit from the greasiness of good ole oil-based lubricant). My spelling sucks (dyslexia) so even if I pre-write it, iw will still be bad sweatdrop Thanks for pointing that out, good thing I'm here so that I know thees facts. But ya it would have to be a synthetic lubricant, it would be something from the space age that replaced oil lubricants (at some point we will run out of normal oil) also there are ways to grow oil (something with algae) I'm not to worry about lubricant's, but I'll remember to put them in.
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 10:38 pm
Moon and Star My spelling sucks (dyslexia) so even if I pre-write it, iw will still be bad sweatdrop
Don't sweat it my dear, I can't spell to save my life. You don't have to know how to spell to get your point accross.
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Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 10:49 pm
Dixie Dellamorto Moon and Star My spelling sucks (dyslexia) so even if I pre-write it, iw will still be bad sweatdrop
true true, I also have painting to fall back on. anywho when I do a story it will be about the character more then the gadgets and steam. but they will be damn cool.
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Posted: Sat Apr 18, 2009 12:55 pm
Ok I have the first seen of the short story down, it's not much but it will set to how the rest of it will go. So far it dosn't seem all that steampunky (well except that he is on an airship casino) But I don't want to just throw it into peoples faces. If you like to edit anything to help it work, then I would not be insulted if you do.
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