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Rivii

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 9:45 am


Hospital of Horror

I feel a crash, I hear a scream
Lights dance around, it's like a dream

I'm sprawled on the ground, the police surround me
While I lay in a thick puddle, my blood red sea

They put me on a stretcher, wheel me off to the car
It was the longest trip ever, the hospitals quite far

I’m now in a bed, near a lot of knives
I hear other patients scream for their lives

What’s going on here? It’s all black and white
Why is everyone filled with hatred and fright?

I got quite curious, I knew something was wrong
When the nurse came in and said “you won’t last long”

She said “They think they’ll live, they never do
Did you think we’d make an exception for you?”

Your suppose to save me, stop pulling these tricks
I see all the people you’d rather kill than fix

I sit in my room, scared and alone
I look to the morgue, where the bodies are thrown

The door suddenly closes; I’m locked in the room
Lying in the hospital, that only knows doom

I laid there forever until the doctor came
Tools in his hand to start his game

He positioned the shot, and stuck it in deep
I saw nurses flood in as I drifted to sleep

They wheel me down to the trauma room hall
And put me in a corner with blood on the wall

The Clashing of knives sounded through the air
They’re going to kill me, this isn’t fair!

The hours tick by, it’s getting quite late
I lay there helplessly as they operate

They take things out and put them in a cup
And when they’re finished, they sew me back up

An hour later I wake up to see
A black abyss, they’ve blinded me!

My stomach hurts, I have a disease
I don’t want to die, save me please!

I cough up blood, my whole body aches
As the doctor puts on that smile he fakes

I’m getting quite angry, I want to know why
The doctor came in and said “You’re going to die”

I’m going to die? So I’ve heard
But there’s no escape, I’m trapped like a bird

So kill me now, stop the pain
Stop me now before I go insane

Why is this happening? It must be fate
That I lay here awaiting my inevitable death date
PostPosted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 1:27 pm


Quite amazing. Imagery was nice, and I say that alot because my point of view is how well I am able to imagine what is being wrote. You didn't seem to struggle on the rhyming, either, because it all flowed very well together. Very very nicely written.

Love and Peace,

Vince

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