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Ballad of the Corrupt Knight

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Kyoko the Goth Author

PostPosted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 3:55 pm


So, yeah. I had to write a poem in traditional ballad form for school. I'm not particularly fond of it (not a fan of having to conform to certain standards, especially in poetry) but I wanted other people's opinions on it. And, so, the Ballad of the Corrupt Knight.


The Thief has come again
He travels in the night
So no one ever sees him
To halt his wary flight

The princess lies inside her den
Awaiting her corrupted knight
They know his chances are so slim
She worries o’er their plight

None know how or where or when
The man slips out of sight
But the guard, so very grim,
Will catch him on this night

The Thief thinks this is his domain;
He is mostly right
But he is seen, in light so dim,
And raises ire and spite

With a smirk (for he is vain)
He invades the princess’ sight
The guard then, on a whim,
Aims his bow to start the fight

The princess’ smile, she can’t contain
To see her crooked knight
Guard knows that his chance is slim
And shoots the Thief with much delight

The thief stops in utter pain
And gives the girl a fright
The arrow shaft, while very slim,
Had such a piercing bite

The Thief’s shirt is now red with stain
He falls down from his height
The girl weeps and pleads with him;
She loved her wicked, perverse knight


So... thoughts?
PostPosted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 12:47 pm


Nice poem, I like the rhyming and the story
it's really nicely written.

redmind200

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