Welcome to Gaia! ::

This is really very enjoyable - I can't wait to read more! 3nodding The concept seems very interesting (For a few seconds I though it would be a sort of Changeling child scenario but this is even more compelling)

I do have a critique to offer - When refering to the mother and child - although I realize names were probably left out on purpose, I would recommend considering other ways of identifying them - such as "The child" or even "her baby" for the kid, and "the young mother" or something similar. It isn't widespread, but at times, because both characters are female, determining who's who can be slow -

"She frantically looked around, no sign of her. Her eyes became wet and her umbrella dropped to the ground. She was gone."

Admittedly, when I went looking for a quote just now, I found that I'd exagerated the problem in writing about it, and that it only occurs a few times.

Aside from that - a very interesting piece.

Aww... your comments are very enjoyable to read! biggrin I know exactly what you mean with the "mother and child" thing. I actually had written it before and I used that way too much so I redid it and it turned out much better. I will look into see if any variation works. (and yes I did leave out the names on purpose because further on in the story if you knew who each were it'd give stuff away!)
And I really like the "A fistfull of flowers" title. But... the rest of the story doesn't really have anything to do with flowers its about- wait a second... I almost went and gave everything away... Whew... that was close. Well, I will say this, it was mentioned in here but not much. I do apprecaite that you actually thought about it. biggrin

Also, do you think I introduced the characters too fast? Or was it good? I'm really bad at getting character's descriptions in... and now that I think about it... I didn't describe the mother at all... wow...

Anyway, I'm glad you find it interesting. I almost have Chapter 1 done so I'll put that up here quickly.

LOL. Thats why I like reading your comments, they make me laugh.
And don't feel bad, I've had the prologue done for a while now, this is just the first day posting it. I've been working on Chapter 1 for a while too... maybe a week or so. I have random writing bursts where I write a ton then for weeks at a time I don't write anything... xd
And you can't have any spoilers! I will not cave under pressure! stare
...i hope not... sweatdrop

Ya...I kinda discovered that... sweatdrop (wasn'tstalkingiSWEAR)

But I bashed my head on the desk here at work a few times, so I think its all gone...

Don't worry about blonde moments - I'm having...complete-lack-of-anything-resembling-brain-moments. S'what comes of working at one job from 7:30am and then going to the other till 12:30 (45minutes from now)

I hope I can sleep in tomorrow before rehearsal...>.<

Damn, you found me out... sweatdrop

Currently I am at the Front Desk of a hotel (night shift) I also work at a cafe.

Ya well... *pppppthhtththhhhbbbbbb!*

I do theatre - I'm in a show next March, and we just started rehearsals. It's gunna be a hard one - a Play within a play style. Should be fun though.

So, what do you guys think of chapter 1? I hope i didn't jump into the action too fast. Thats the only perfect spot to start the story that has confusion and makes the 2nd chapter exciting... blaugh