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 Posted: Thu Nov 20, 2008 7:04 am
Kinda emo... I guess. just random off the top of my head.
As per usual, alert me of any misspellings.
Untitled
Hate, Animosity,
Whats the point?
Forgiveness, Remorse,
Too many faked actions.
Love, Joy
Who's idea were these?
Sympathy, Camaraderie,
Lies amongst 'friends'
Envy, Jealousy
Ah, humans true nature!
Anger, Brutality,
This what you want!
Pleasure, Euphoria,
Through someone else's pain!
Numb, Desensitized,
Twas too much, and now?
Loss, Disinterest,
you'll never feel,
Emotion, Reaction
What you once had.
Pain, Blood,
Well,something is felt,
Suicide, Death,
The only way out.
Glorious, Return,
The feelings are back!
Split, Second,
*Gasp* Before IMPACT!.
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Posted: Thu Nov 20, 2008 4:02 pm
It's kinda strange giving you praise on here considering I'm sitting right next to you currently, but whateva. So, i definitely like this, even though it has a strange pattern. I didn't really read through it for misspellings. I like the message, it's a bit darker (read-much darker) than usual, but it's good. All about life, and quite satirical, as though life has a sense of humor. (It does)
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Posted: Sun Dec 07, 2008 6:31 am
It is rather "emo." No offense, of course. Not everything written is perfect and no one can be expected to just exude and expel excellence exclusively. I do always applaud the courage it takes to post a work publicly though. It doesn't matter if it's not your best though, you did say that you just kinda typed something out. This being so, your works writ with effort and wrought with care could have potential. With a good vocabulary, some effort, and a bit of inspiration many things are possible. Thank you for sharing, sir. smile
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Posted: Sat Dec 13, 2008 2:20 am
And thank you for commenting, my good Sirrah. 3nodding
I likes it when people comment, though I don't get around to commenting on others works as much as i would like.
but yes, a little emo... although its supposed to be on the lighter side, kind of a madness intertwined with the upwelling of an emotional thought train
but yeah, Thanks for commenting. XD
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