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Please tell me what you think. I encourage brutal honesty. Don't hold back.

If you come softly
as a feather drifts down through the air
then unnoticed, you may enter
they can't sense you
they can't hear

And if you come softly
as the moonlight breaks the darkness
then you may wake me
with a brushing of your lips

Oh, if you whisper
sweet sweet words to me
I will whisper them as well
and you may guide my lips
wherever you want them to go

If you are gentle
not a vulgar sound
will break the silence
and our bliss won't be disturbed

And if you'll hold me
we can fall asleep
to the beating of our hearts
and as we drift away together
we are one

I like that stanza the best. It's sort of like... You're saying for him to be gentle because you don't want to be disturbed, but it feels as though you want him to be gentle because you want him to care. If you read closely, the line "not a vulgar sound" it shows how much you value gentleness.

All around great poem. ^ ^