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 Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 4:01 am
love,
we all want to love,
we all want to be loved,
why do we want love?
it makes us happy,
why do we need love?
it makes us whole,
the one who gives the love,
they are but an extension,
an extension of your own being,
two body's,
one soul,
one completes the other,
as does the opposite,
where are you?
you are there somewhere,
somewhere i know,
but i look and still cant see you,
when you come out you gain new beauty in my eyes,
you are always there,
but sometimes your someone else entirely,
i wish it was only you,
but thats unfair,
unfair to everyone else,
i wish i could be with you always,
but alas i am stuck watching,
watching you watch me,
with those eyes so beautiful,
i never want to see tears from you because of me,
i will always sit here,
watching you,
because you and I,
we are one and the same,
one soul in two body's.
i watch,
and i wait,
i wait for you,
so i can love you,
and you to love me...
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 9:39 am
It's good. I like the part at the end, where you tie back in with the idea you mentioned in the first couple of lines, about one soul in two bodies.
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Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 10:25 pm
I loved how you wrote about 80% of it. The other 20% was lovely as well but quite redundant and seemed to simple compared to the other 80%. Although the beginning and ending were quite lovely together, I may add.
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