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 Posted: Tue Nov 04, 2008 7:04 pm
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2008 4:51 pm
I like it, I can relate to it a lot.
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2008 8:29 pm
It's just a sucky vent poem, it wasn't supposed to even rhyme... then it did rhyme. I just can't write free verse. *sigh* I guess it's ok. Needs serious rythem flow work though. Wait... why am I critiquing my OWN poem? Random.
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2008 9:38 pm
*Raises eyebrow* Sometimes these "sucky vent poems" end up really good. Like this one.
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Posted: Thu Nov 06, 2008 3:33 am
My favorite word weaver, heart Fantastic work as always. It's dripping with sorrow. I love it.
[story] It reminds me alot of my year I met my wife. I had all this bottled creativity and I'd been slowly expressing it in music, art, and writing. But when she came along It all died... I couldn't write anything worthwhile. I felt as if she'd sapped all my talent. It was so frustrating not being able to express myself. I'm just glad it was only a phase, without my creativity who knows what would have happened to me. [/story]
Very good work, You never cease to amaze me....
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Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2008 11:15 pm
I love the style and flow of this poem and it's meaning. Your style always varies from piece to piece but it always remains true to who you are. One word to describe this poem: Flawless.
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