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 Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2008 11:38 pm
Well, this is a poem I wrote. I would like some input plzzzzzzzzzxzx.
Just give your opinion please :]
Criticize awaaaaaaaaaaaaaay.
Today
That day…
You told me his lies
You felt no self-worth
Raging hurricane inside
That day…
A part of me died
Lamentable gusts
I wished would subside
One day…
Your hand touched with mine
A sun-lit sensation
Our hearts just aligned
Yesterday…
I longed for you here
Your fiery kiss
And warm hugs I hold dear
Today…
Let shrouded gloom meet dawn
As I rekindle your flame
While the cyclone is calm
Today…
Our love is bliss
Tornadoes turn their heads
And let our fires co-exist
Today…
The day I won’t forget
Our torches were lit
I hope we never regret
Today…
My fire still shines bright
Our love goes unmatched
Not a gust of wind in sight
Today…
You hold me so tight
Our love burns so bright
Let it never turn night
Tomorrow…
I’m unaware if you’ll stay
A breeze may approach…
So let’s make all tomorrows today.
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Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 6:37 am
I like it. It really flows.
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