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 Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2008 12:42 pm
i do,
i really do like you,
do you like me?
do you want me to?
if not i can stop.
if not dont say yes,
if you do,
i would really like you to,
maby like me to?
i know its quite sudden,
so sudden to learn,
that someone like me,
is attracted to someone like you,
so please, do you like me?
or do you not want me to like you?
i want to know,
but i dont want you to feel bad...
but i dont want to ruin,
to ruin what we have...
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Posted: Sat Sep 27, 2008 3:56 pm
I really liked the flow and feel of this one at the beginning. It seemed to get a bit choppy towards the end, and the use of "but" to begin two lines in a row seemed a bit off. But I enjoyed the last line, it seemed to fit. ^.^
P.S. Maby should be Maybe.
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Posted: Sat Sep 27, 2008 7:20 pm
yea i thought it was really bad... but yea... thx...
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