kirkman1990
this is just something off the back of my mind.
my life is the nice life, always caryin around knifes. killin cunts, smokin blunts. dont get in my way if you cant handle me, i took on the whole world and now everybodys sick of me. you cant break me or shake me, but i can break you and shake you, make you jump 10 feet off the ground and cut your legs off. Then whos the fool? So many ways i can kill you.
the terminator aint got nothin on me, im always packin a SMG, i got 57 large and my own CDs. take look around what do you have? you aint got nothin that i have. so take a chill pill before gettin up in my grills, and start packin before confronting the real deal.
its kind of stupid since i didnt put much effort into it.
With the exception of all of the sentence struction, this kind of reminds me of when I first started writing when I was in high school. Technically, I started in middle school, but was only a couple "songs." Didn't get more serious until my 10th grade year.
Try working on your sentence structure though. Right now, it looks like you're writing a paragraph that happens to rhyme. Lol. Try writing bars. A bar is two lines.
Example of a line(In case you don't know yet):
I render little blocks brittle like Lego brick walls.
A bar would be:
I render little blocks brittle like a Lego brick wall.
Make you break like Humpty after a sick fall.
So basically, a bar is two lines combined. Try not to make your lines too long though.
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