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 Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 4:19 pm
where did you go?
where have you gone?
i've needed you by my side all along.
when will you come again?
will you still love me?
will you still care?
will you still be there when i need you?
will you even care? i hope will will find each other again,
to love each other once more.
sorry you had to endure this piece of crap... this is what happens when i try to force a poem out...comment if you like...
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Posted: Fri Aug 22, 2008 8:54 am
"will you still care?
will you still be there when i need you?
will you even care? i hope will will find each other again,"
I dont think its a peice of crap. Its fine with the exception of two things. I think the - will you still care/will you even care (italics) is a bit redundant, and - i hope will will find each other again - should be - i hope we will..-
Nothing big ^.^
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