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ChaosEnvoyXIII

PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 12:14 pm


In this life we search for answers and truths
We search for explanations and proofs
We look for someone who will understand
We look for someone to hold our hand

We look for the easiest way out
We look for a choice we won’t doubt
We speak of compassion and pride
Yet we’re all dead inside

We yell and fight
And it goes on into the night
We search for items of wealth
And half of us don’t watch our health

We make things to lessen our population
We’re such a mixed up civilization
We say we want happiness and peace
Yet the battles don’t cease

We forget promises and morals
We forget that we are mortals
We make many mistakes yet we never learn
We live life without a concern

We forget to care for one another
We stab, cut, and slice each other
We buy a mask and wear it forever
Our relationships can easily severe

In this life we forget our reason to live
We forget how to forgive
We learn how to kill
We learn to just pop a pill

We forget our childhood dreams
There is a reason your soul screams
Slowly from the inside out we decay
And go on living in pain till our dieing day  
PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 1:01 pm


I love it how you make it to resemble life with your poem.

Beloved Ritsy


ChaosEnvoyXIII

PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 1:59 pm


thank you ^_^
PostPosted: Sun Aug 17, 2008 6:40 pm


anyone else wanna put in there say?

ChaosEnvoyXIII


Scazarith
Crew

PostPosted: Fri Aug 22, 2008 9:06 am


Sorry for the late response, I just now got to read this.

This is really good Chaos. Seriously. The only things that bothered me were:

the line "And half of us don't watch our health". I feel like that could be worded to flow better.

and

In the third line from the bottom "you're" should be "your".

Otherwise I cant say enough about how awesome and well composed I think this poem is. Really, bravo.
PostPosted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 12:46 am


very good, way better than my crap...

Tseko the Living Shadow

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