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 Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 3:13 pm
Thsi song is about a time I just started freaking out and started cussing out all my friends when we were hanging out for no reason. it didn't feel like me but like i was sick or something. I didn't know how to explain it so this the closest I can get. The song is not finished, i only have the first verse and chorus. And the chorus needs ALOT of work. enjoy give me comments. Help me a better song writer and give helpful constructive ideas and I will use it. Thank you for your support and help guys.
What kind of sickness do I have
I don't know it makes me so glad
It gives me company cause the rest have gone
What knid of sickness do you loan
I dont know it's not my own
It just wastes all my time taking everything of mine
My sickness spills like a waterfall
From my mouth and into your ear
It will and can take all
That we've always held dear
My sickness My sickness
It is the only illness
(the chorus sucks and needs a lot of help)
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 4:45 pm
Maybe instead of, "It is the only illness," you should have "It is the soul's illness?"
Otherwise, great ******** songwriting. I'd definitely be interested in the finished paper product.
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 5:54 pm
Thats really good man thanks. the last two lines need help and i'll definatly use that
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 11:33 pm
I like it, whenever it's done, update your post and post it
I'd like to see it.
3nodding
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