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Lyonette

PostPosted: Fri Jul 18, 2008 10:32 am


This is my writing page in the Library. Please be nice to me, but I really do want feedback on how much my writing sucks.  
PostPosted: Fri Jul 18, 2008 10:45 am


(I wrote this for poetry class in grade three, and I want to see what people think of it.)

The Magic Box


I will put in my box:
The sound of a leaf falling to the ground,
As an ancient forest dies.
The feel of thin netting against your skin,
The sound of singing forest faeries as they dance around a fire.
I will put in my box:
The whisper of a lover as you go off to bed
The breath of the wind on a warm summer's night.
The gem colored wings of a butterfly.
My box is made of leaves and vines
And the stuff of dreams,
The hinges are made of dragon's teeth.
I will walk in my box through a rainforest
Rich with the earth's bounty,
Filled with the fullness of life.

(c) Lyonette, 2008

Lyonette


Chaos Dragon 13
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 1:26 pm


Pretty good! I'm impressed. Did you really write that in third grade? And people say I have talent?
The way you broke your lines up in some places made it a little hard to follow some times but it was good biggrin
PostPosted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 3:49 pm


Thank you biggrin I'll edit it now.

Lyonette


Lyonette

PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 2:50 pm


((I don't really know what this is, I just decided to write it. This is just a rough copy...))

Lest anyone should judge me wrongly, let me explain some things to you 'fore you turn the page. I am not writing this to garner praise or pity, I do not bare my soul in order to teach a lesson. I do this for myself, if only for remembrance of things that I have lost, things gained. So I assure you, if you put down this bundle of pages now, I will bear no grudge against you, though I would urge you to take them up again, that you might share my memories, and that the things that came before you will not be forgotten.  
PostPosted: Tue May 05, 2009 5:14 pm


In the next few weeks or during the summer, I'll be writing a lot of really awesome (in my opinion) stories. So. Yeah. I just felt like giving you a heads-up for some reason.

Edit:

Yay! I'm very happy, I finally have a story to write! My lovely muse is kind!
My very first story, coming soon.

Lyonette

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