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 Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:02 pm
And by how'd I mean how would, so no excuses for those of you who haven't tried ever ever ever.
There is of course always the problem of terminology, haha, just for starters. It's so easy for a story of that genre in particular to slip into the ridiculous with a few misplaced words, or the obscene. So how to keep to the pathetically fine line in between? Especially for those of us who have no practical experience whatsoever. Ahem.
Also, I was wondering whether it would be appropriate for me to post such a short story on here or whether the ToS makes that impossible. (I wasn't clear from the wording.)
Thoughts?
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 11:10 pm
Well, I suck hard at graphic anything, so I couldn't really tell you.
I will however move this to Writing Advice.
I know I know, it's a barren wasteland there, but I'm sure you'll get some traffic.
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Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2008 11:52 pm
Ah, thanks. Should probably pay more attention to subforum categories. *shifty eyes*
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Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 10:54 am
Well... Mine will always fade out, always.
Or just never mention it.
However, in reading Neil Gaiman's Stardust, I find that he's much more of a stater about it. *Coughs* Not much detail in it, just... Yeah, I feel really uncomfortable right now, how'd you guess? Anyway, I think fadeouts are much more tasteful. That's kind of how Gaiman does it--somewhere between fading out and actually stating it, he manages to convey the whole process. surprised redface But he only does it to further the story. those scenes are needed. It's when it becomes just for fun that it really becomes tasteless. Like Kirbys. But they were kind of... needed, weren't they, so it really doesn't matter on hers.
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Posted: Thu Jul 17, 2008 12:30 pm
Personally, it depends alot on the overall tone of the novel. I would stay away from statements using words such as (d**k, p***y, c**t, etc) because they are as untasteful and vulgar as the come. (Really... no pun intended there..) They are probably only equipped for an actual porn novel.
I don't necessarily agree with fade-outs either. Yes, they are good and useful at times. But then sometimes you need to develop the sensuality, the passtion, or the desire only for sex, within a scene. All I can say is try looking up some authors. Do research in the Romance section of the library or book store.. See how a published author writes such a scene.
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Posted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 10:20 am
Um, well, I'm no expert sweatdrop But I think...describing everything until the sex itself, and then kind of using a transition sentence t describe the sex, then stating the end. Besides, the foreplay and afterscenes are the best part.
Saying things like p***s and v****a rapidly make it a porn novel...see if there's another way to describe it without those words.
But um...You've read Piano Man. You know my take on it xd
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Eloquent Conversationalist
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 7:52 pm
What I've tried doing is using a few metaphors that help the reader know exactly what's happening and without letting the story get too explicit. I also tend to use a lot of detail for a simple act. Like kissing, I would write something like "His mouth delved upon hers, his lips devouring the sensuous peach-like taste of them."
It's easier to make a reader feel a scene like that and get the point across without having to go in to heavy detail about the act itself. No one enjoys reading something as simple as "their sexual night together" when you can make an epic two-pager! xd
And like the others have mentioned, avoid the vulgar language. I've found in some of the romantic novels I have read that I appreciate it more when the author refers to it as "bottom" instead of "butt" or "buttocks". I also appreciate the word "mound" instead of "v****a", and so on.
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Posted: Fri Dec 19, 2008 7:19 am
I agree with the 'avoiding vulgar words' thing. Definitely wouldn't want to read something that has too much vulgarity. Also, I believe that describing the sensations that the characters are feeling, rather than what they are doing, works well. I'd give you an example, but I don't know if it would abide by the ToS... If we ever do figure out if we can post that kind of writing, then I will of course post some of mine to give you an idea of how I do it. =)
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Posted: Tue Dec 23, 2008 10:28 pm
-coughs-
Well I tend to not do fade outs. For some reason my fade outs are worse than the sex scene itself.
I end up gorging myself on the sex scenes in actual books before I write one otherwise the scene itself is really boring and plain... monotonous, I guess you could say.
I avoid words like 'p***y' and 'c**k' because I find those words vulgar and they turn readers away in my opinion; though a few authors I've read can pull it off well. I've never used vulgarity to describe the human body so I don't think I'll ever start.
I always have to write sex scenes alone because I have noisy brothers who like to look over my shoulder at what I write. So no no on sexy scenes when they are in the room.
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Posted: Sat Apr 18, 2009 2:07 pm
s**t, you guys can post whatever you want. If there were rules half my stuff would be taken out by now!
XD I do love sex scenes. Once I got a boyfriend they got much more interesting. No one knows sex like a boy does.
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Posted: Sat Apr 18, 2009 2:13 pm
xd The story in question is now extremely old and recognizable to me as extremely bad.
Oddly enough, it has to do, in a sense, with the fine line between casual sex and prostitution.
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Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 7:31 pm
there is a very fine line. ho yes. I would like to see your version of sex scenes sometime, Des!
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Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 9:18 pm
Maybe I will rewrite it sometime until it is actually semi-decent-ish.
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2009 5:40 pm
'kaysauz. Here goes. Sex is important not to ruin and soo soo soooooo easy to do that with. It depends on the mood and the characters and a lot of factors. I usually write it out because, for real, fade outs just make me think the author was lazy, uncomfortable, or not proficient enough. And honestly, that's the best way to handle a problem if you fall into that category. Most people dooooon't write good sex.
Now. Language. If it's supposed to be pornish, use the horrible words. If it's rape, then make it vulgar and make it gross and nasty and everything else. If it's supposed to be slow and sensual and between teens, make it a little awkward. A little unsure. Because that's what it's like, yeah? Adults, make it rushed and a bit old. Like, they've got a history with all these other people that aren't in the story. Make it sound like that.
I dunno. Sex comes unreasonably easy for me to write. Granted, I've been doing it since like, sixth grade. ....Writing it. Not having sex. Geeze. That sounded bad. And such horrible stories make me lulz lyk woah. I can hardly handle them. I posted a story in the WIP that has sex in it. You can check there?
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