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 Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 5:27 pm
" Escape From Heaven"  ' If you could escape from heaven, am I the first person you would want to see?' gungirl.deviantart.comI wanted to thank everyone who helped me! But I really honestly HATE my coloring style crying I know a lot of people really like my art but my style is just killing me. This just has to be a warm up for me, since I haven' t drawn anything in over a month. It seems like it's lacking so much detail (I think that's what is killing me the most) Anyways this is just to get me some attention because I'm going to start doing commissions on DA (I did them on gaia for a while but I'm broke and I really need some cash) Thanks again to everyone <3 G.G.
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Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 6:48 pm
i think everything looks great in general, nd ooh are they in water? oh *reads title* hmm i think it'd be better if the guy had longer hair so that his would be flowy too nd if they're eyes were closed would probably help the picture flow better .. nd i tihnk her out fit is cool!
ah-ha .. the right hand of the girl looks kinda weird because her thumb isn't really noticable
but all your anatomy is awesome! nd i believe that is all biggrin very great job for a sketch!
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Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 11:42 pm
Wow. Your overall anatomy is really great, especially for the dude--I mean, guy. There are a couple adjustments that could be made though to help you with your anatomy problems though. It's mostly for the woman. I really like your guy, though the suggestion of making his hair longer is one that should be considered (although I like him either way; he's really well drawn). Anyway, for the woman, I fear her arms are just a bit too short (especially the one that is draped over the guy's shoulder). Thus, her hands are also a tad small for her body. Her belly button should also be raised. You don't have to change any of her anatomy in her torso or whatever are you count the belly button in or near, just move the belly button up. It's too low on her torso, her stomach. Actually, it should probably be right behind the guy's arem so you don't really have to worry about it. And the final, and biggest thing, that got me was her chin. She looks like she has a VERY slanted face. Like if she was looking at me, I'd think she had no chin or something, perhaps a massive forehead. I think you should extend the chin out toward the guy's chin a little more so she doesn't have the effect. If you tilt your head so it's angled with the woman's I think you should be able to see the effect that was created. Oh yeah, and the neck is also a tad bit too skinny. It's a really wonderful picture though. Please don't think otherwise. I hope you color it too; it'll really define her outifit so much more. blaugh
Maybe to help with the face angle thing of the woman:
http://auroracarina-chan.deviantart.com/art/kiss-tutorial-24271037
http://auroracarina-chan.deviantart.com/art/Tutorial-Hands-while-kissing-52195117
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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 12:26 am
Tarff Wow. Your overall anatomy is really great, especially for the dude--I mean, guy. There are a couple adjustments that could be made though to help you with your anatomy problems though. It's mostly for the woman. I really like your guy, though the suggestion of making his hair longer is one that should be considered (although I like him either way; he's really well drawn). Anyway, for the woman, I fear her arms are just a bit too short (especially the one that is draped over the guy's shoulder). Thus, her hands are also a tad small for her body. Her belly button should also be raised. You don't have to change any of her anatomy in her torso or whatever are you count the belly button in or near, just move the belly button up. It's too low on her torso, her stomach. Actually, it should probably be right behind the guy's arem so you don't really have to worry about it. And the final, and biggest thing, that got me was her chin. She looks like she has a VERY slanted face. Like if she was looking at me, I'd think she had no chin or something, perhaps a massive forehead. I think you should extend the chin out toward the guy's chin a little more so she doesn't have the effect. If you tilt your head so it's angled with the woman's I think you should be able to see the effect that was created. Oh yeah, and the neck is also a tad bit too skinny. It's a really wonderful picture though. Please don't think otherwise. I hope you color it too; it'll really define her outifit so much more. blaugh Maybe to help with the face angle thing of the woman: http://auroracarina-chan.deviantart.com/art/kiss-tutorial-24271037 http://auroracarina-chan.deviantart.com/art/Tutorial-Hands-while-kissing-52195117 WOW you've been the most helpfull lol I love people like you some my think you're picky but you're the people I look for when I ask for critique thank you so much everything you said I can see biggrin rofl whee
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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 11:31 am
Glad I could help! blaugh *hug* It really is a cool picture though. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 6:51 pm
Tarff Glad I could help! blaugh *hug* It really is a cool picture though. 3nodding lol so does it look better now?
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 12:11 am
gun_girl Tarff Glad I could help! blaugh *hug* It really is a cool picture though. 3nodding lol so does it look better now?
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 6:27 am
Maybe they should be somewhere high? It feels like it should be in an open airy place. on a little ledge by a mountain with plenty of caves so they could go run away together lol I don't know lol and the sky could be opening and a ray of light could be shining down on them. :O You could do a contrast between them and their background. For example the sky could be a little overcast but above them its bright and cheerful. They could look like their frozen in time in happiness in the light thing and OMG I'm going to stop here because my imagination is going to start getting the better of me lol sorry 4laugh i hope it was helpful 4laugh lol You colour very well btw. This is an amazing piece
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 2:54 pm
it came out great! the changes you made with our advice really made a difference i really like how everything came out 'specially the hair nd cloring heart
tarff- those tutorials are really good *steals your library of references nd tutorials* twisted i'm addicted to them because of you i've been looking through lots nd not only the ones you post but others, too gonk *gasp* i'm looking at one right now clothes-tutorial
ah back to you gun girl- for the background i agree with shaz .. but since its called escape from heaven shouldn't you make heaven look like a bad place? nd where they're landing a good place like the story i imagined was that the girl is some sort of angelic being who lives in heaven but fell in love with the mortal man nd heaven's rules didn't let her have a mortal lover so she escapes! nd they go on on romantic escapades ..
the backgound should definately have a sense of privacy, love, nd maybe freedom?
idea in an opening in the middle of forest with creatures all around them nd flowers
idea have the four elements (earth/dirt wind/breezy water/river fire/volcano) somewhere in there nd show the sky contrasting the earthly-ness =P
idea like shaz said shining light from where she/they descended)
well that's all for me i really like how this came out i'd really like to see if you make a background for it 3nodding great job! nd i hope my suggestions help out in some way lol nd good luck keep up the good work!
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 6:20 am
o wow its beautiful smile i kinda like how she's sort of transparent-ish. It gives her a sort of other-worldly feel. Kinda like she's there but can't be there completely for him biggrin I love the background! your artwork on deviantart is amazing!!!
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 9:11 am
shaz_180906 o wow its beautiful smile i kinda like how she's sort of transparent-ish. It gives her a sort of other-worldly feel. Kinda like she's there but can't be there completely for him biggrin I love the background! your artwork on deviantart is amazing!!! Wow thank you so much ^^ heart
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 7:08 am
It's great! I love it! heart How about giving her a pair of wings since she's from heaven? xd
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 12:20 pm
Hayashi Kiko It's great! I love it! heart How about giving her a pair of wings since she's from heaven? xd A few people had me concidering it, but I decided not to go with that. Besides I became so frustraited with it I didn't want to do much more work on it rofl
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 9:17 pm
shaz_180906 o wow its beautiful smile i kinda like how she's sort of transparent-ish. It gives her a sort of other-worldly feel. Kinda like she's there but can't be there completely for him biggrin I love the background! your artwork on deviantart is amazing!!!
good job -can't wait to see more from you
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