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 Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 8:05 am
I've been reading too much Emily Dickinson.....
Ah well. Enjoy.
Garden
I tended to my garden well
And it bloomed at my call
There were roses in the summertime;
The trees bore fruit in fall.
I fled my garden late one night
Without a backward glance;
I ran from it and all my ghosts
Thinking ne’er to see them again.
When I returned one summertime
Knowing it would be dead
Mourning that I had killed it all
My heart filling with dread,
To my surprise it had grown wild;
Roses spilled over the roof
I truly could not help but smile
At what my garden had come to.
All the years of care and order
Had produced trim plants and trees
But when they could grow without my rules…
They did not die, but flourished free.
How can I teach my heart to love?
How can I teach my heart to love?
I thought that once, I could
But then it shattered in spite of me
And left me broken, to brood.
How can I start to love again?
My broken heart refused;
This time I know I won’t be hurt
This time I know the rules.
But then despite my stern control
It leapt and loved again.
We don’t control our hearts, you know;
All we can do is listen.
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Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 6:39 pm
Neither of them suck but they do show that you have alot on your mind right now. I really liked the first one it sounds alot like change, and new beginnings. Very pretty.
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Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 8:27 pm
I thouroughly enjoyed both of them. LOVE the first.
The only citicism I have is the last line of the last poem. It just doesn't seem to fit.
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 2:19 pm
G: Thanks biggrin
Waffs: <333333 But yes, you are right. I hate that line too. BUt meh...I don't change poetry.
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 5:06 pm
They don't suck. You're just rather self-depreciative. xp
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Posted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 8:12 am
That's what everyone says :/ I'm just honest with myself.
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